Gimme an opinion on this song please (about relationship goin downhil) - Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community

PiercedLip · 07-23-2003, 04:49 PM

I couldnt list it as a .mp3 so just save it or rename to .mp3 and play it with winamp or whatever...This is my friends song called Decending Relations and its about how when u first date how great things are, but as time goes on towards a breakup, it starts to go downhil and suck! Give me some opinions please, they have only really had locals hear it so far... thanks

http://acintegra.hypermart.net/fourt...ding_Relations

-Ryan

thumper · 07-23-2003, 05:59 PM

Ryan,

That's a pretty good song. I REALLY like the last verse. Excellent job on the wording there, and I like the added bit at the end where he holds out the "yooouuuu"(in the blank spot that they teased you with on the first 2 verses by not singing anything there). So, lyrically, it's pretty good. Musically, I was finding myself wanting to hear some more distinct changes between the bridge, refrain, and verses, but it works out good the way it is. Overall, I would definately give it a good listening to. Good job, and thumbs up!

Work a good guitar hook in there, and you've got yourself a single.

--Thumper

ShadowWraith · 07-23-2003, 08:08 PM

Hey, good lyrics overall, but the delivery needs some work. Not to be too critical, but i thought your friends' voice was kind of whiny and nasally at times. Guitar was kind of boring too, might want to throw in some more riffs or possibly a solo instead of just powerchords. Good luck!

PiercedLip · 07-23-2003, 09:11 PM

cool, thanks for the replies. They have only been together about a year. And that year counts them learning guitar, bass, drums. They just "decided" lets make a band, it'd be fun...and learned on their own and if they keep progressing they could have something really good i think!!!!! thanks again

-Ryan

07-23-2003, 04:49 PM	#1 (permalink)
PiercedLip Upright	Gimme an opinion on this song please (about relationship goin downhil) I couldnt list it as a .mp3 so just save it or rename to .mp3 and play it with winamp or whatever...This is my friends song called Decending Relations and its about how when u first date how great things are, but as time goes on towards a breakup, it starts to go downhil and suck! Give me some opinions please, they have only really had locals hear it so far... thanks http://acintegra.hypermart.net/fourt...ding_Relations -Ryan

07-23-2003, 05:59 PM	#2 (permalink)
thumper Tilted Location: Po-dunk	Ryan, That's a pretty good song. I REALLY like the last verse. Excellent job on the wording there, and I like the added bit at the end where he holds out the "yooouuuu"(in the blank spot that they teased you with on the first 2 verses by not singing anything there). So, lyrically, it's pretty good. Musically, I was finding myself wanting to hear some more distinct changes between the bridge, refrain, and verses, but it works out good the way it is. Overall, I would definately give it a good listening to. Good job, and thumbs up! Work a good guitar hook in there, and you've got yourself a single. --Thumper

07-23-2003, 08:08 PM	#3 (permalink)
ShadowWraith Crazy	Hey, good lyrics overall, but the delivery needs some work. Not to be too critical, but i thought your friends' voice was kind of whiny and nasally at times. Guitar was kind of boring too, might want to throw in some more riffs or possibly a solo instead of just powerchords. Good luck!

07-23-2003, 09:11 PM	#4 (permalink)
PiercedLip Upright	cool, thanks for the replies. They have only been together about a year. And that year counts them learning guitar, bass, drums. They just "decided" lets make a band, it'd be fun...and learned on their own and if they keep progressing they could have something really good i think!!!!! thanks again -Ryan