Haiku thread anyone?
 

While i usually detest writing poetry within rules and contraints... i admit to having a strange love affair with Haiku.

just wondering if there are any others out there like me... and anyone who might be interesting in sharing...

for a general overview of the most basic Haiku "rules"
click here http://www.rit.edu/~dpalyka/Haiku.html#howtowritehaiku

that said... on to the Haiku... :)

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young flowers blossom
rain falls nourishing the earth
life is all around
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any takers?

That's pretty good.

Gray skies in the spring
The baseball game is on hold...
TFP all day.

*broad smile*... i LOVE it!

thanks :)

I'm trying to think
Of a whitty spring haiku
I can find nothing


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*grin*... very good... :)

thanks for posting... more to come

this breaks the "try not to use personal pronouns rule"... but i wrote it for Willow... so i wanted to share...
*stupid gushy smile*

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In quiet places
your voice finds me, filling up
the empty spaces

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Does GakFace Like Poems?
Not Really, But Then Again...
I Do Like Haikus

~springrain, I am clearly not in your league. You are actually good.

Spring fashions afire...
Grrl bends at the checkout line
Her nipple says *hi*.

*smiles*... Peetster... i love it!

mine are just sappy and more serious... certainly not "better" , "out league-ing" or anything of the sort... (out league-ing?? *laugh*, i have got to stop making up my own words).
i am a serious amatuer... but am also stubborn as hell, and love trying to make it all fit within the rules... *snicker*

thanks... and keep it coming!

:)

Peetser says he’s “not”
Yet his rhymes bring a smile to
Day weary faces

It actually did. :-)

~springrain writes haiku
invented words comes easy...
redefining art.

Meant to be a compliment. :-)

I agree, I think this is a very good haiku. Old form, new tone and language and a unique and abrupt topic. nice.

HiThereDere... re: Peetsters above Haiku... i completely agree...

blending the old and traditional with fresh and new is one of the reasons it fascinates me so...

how 'bout some of your own?? ;)

OK, it breaks the personal pronouns rule, but this came to me at work one day:

Man! This weed is Great!
The last time I was this high
I drooled on my shirt.

My favorite Haiku has got to be Dennis Miller's, though:

The Umbrella drinks
The Master of Sassy jive
Isaac rules the waves

Spring is in the air
Music fills the morning sky
singing is the bird

Mr. Bungle... :)... very good... follows all the guidelines... simple... but paints a clear picture...

thanks!

Animals in Spring

Muscles clench, the grinding two

Love parts as a moan.

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Is this Haiku? I really am unable of deciding for myself.

Sweet calm of silence
plays a sorrowfull part in
end of school freedom

Summer, make me dumb
So I can't speak of the pain
of Winter, Fall, Spring

Summer laze and haze
Makes writing Haikus take long
When brain takes long naps

Nature needs some shade
from a brutal, savage sun.
Too Much ripening.

I wrote this one a while ago

Sun rises on
Snow covered car
So cold

I just took the German lyrics from Tool's "Die Eier Von Satan" and made them into a quasi-haiku for this one. I know it ain't mine, but if you know German, it's kinda funny and stupid


Eine halbe Tasse
Staubzucker
und keine Eier

English translation:

One half cup
powdered sugar
and no eggs

See? No sense at all.

one haiku involving TFP's money situation inspired my peetster

give them your money
without all your donations
we will surely die.

far up in slow hills
dream of smoke city dancing
lately, without pills

bobdobbs... excellent imagery.... i love it... :)

Haiku comes easy,
in this lonely edge of town.
Queens of the Stone Age
blares raucous from the t.v.
Ah, it's some repeat.

Nature deviates for me.

As I welcome rules
I detest iron structure.
but it feels so good.

What? No -"Him Her I, Me You"?

Begin to describe
something outside of yourself.

Lazer Tag Was Fun
Met A Girl, Without Her name
Now My Mind Is Lost



My Mind Has Left Me
Bored Beyond Comprehension
The Night Is Wasted...

thank you spring

charlie parker died
from living too much in truth
his shadow blows on

bobdobbs... :)... thank you... and everyone else for sharing in this...

very good haiku above btw... great imagery... simple... captures a snapshot in a wonderful way...

1.
Spring Storms flourish
Souls hide from its fury
Growth has come

2.
With growth blooming
Summers essences bloom within Galaxygirl
Alive and happy

Did I do it right?

PS...I like rules! although it doesn't mean I always follow them.

Five Syllables First
Then use Seven Syllables
Back To Five, You're Done!!


Here's a favorite that a friend wrote a few years ago... :D
Throughout Life I've Learned
Girls Taste Like Potato Chips...
You Can't Eat Just One

(hahaha isnt' that hilarious? haha)

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Just said 2 more to Z while talking to him on AIM.. here they are ;)
(mind you I AM about to go eat some food.

My poetry is
In the form of a Haiku
Isn't it Shibby?

I Really Like Food.
It Is About Time To Eat.
Talk To You Later

i8one2... i love rules too... until i have to follow them... *chuckle*
GakFace... yours... the first one... is my favorite in your post *smile*

great haiku everyone! :)

please keep it coming...

Actually, they are quite good. I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier when I first read them. :-)

Here is one a Japanese friend of mine wrote about me.

http://members.cox.net/rcordan/images/haiku.gif

Transliteration:
a-me-ri-ka-ni
mi-do-ri-me-wo-shi-ta
ri-cha-a- do-zo

Translation:
In America
There is a man who has green-colored eyes
His name is Richard.


While I can write poetry, I'm horrible at keeping track of syllibals so I'm lousy with haiku. Just as my friend can write haiku well, but she has difficulty with any poetry in English.

Game: Diablo 2
Problem: Way Too Many hacks
Solution: New Patch

There is a different way at looking at a Haiku :)

I Made Ten Good Puns...
Then Tried To Win A Contest...
No Pun In Ten did.

:D

I like the Seasons.
My favorite is in May.
Spring Rain is Way cool.

('nuff suckin' up for me :D)

I'm not sure of the rules of the haiku anyway

A smiling TV person
still hurts on the inside
cannot run away

i really like you
the third fall always hurts
not so lucky star