Haiku thread anyone?
 

While i usually detest writing poetry within rules and contraints... i admit to having a strange love affair with Haiku.

just wondering if there are any others out there like me... and anyone who might be interesting in sharing...

for a general overview of the most basic Haiku "rules"
click here http://www.rit.edu/~dpalyka/Haiku.html#howtowritehaiku

that said... on to the Haiku... :)

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young flowers blossom
rain falls nourishing the earth
life is all around
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any takers?

That's pretty good.

Gray skies in the spring
The baseball game is on hold...
TFP all day.

*broad smile*... i LOVE it!

thanks :)

I'm trying to think
Of a whitty spring haiku
I can find nothing


xXxEmptyxXx

*grin*... very good... :)

thanks for posting... more to come

this breaks the "try not to use personal pronouns rule"... but i wrote it for Willow... so i wanted to share...
*stupid gushy smile*

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In quiet places
your voice finds me, filling up
the empty spaces

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Does GakFace Like Poems?
Not Really, But Then Again...
I Do Like Haikus

~springrain, I am clearly not in your league. You are actually good.

Spring fashions afire...
Grrl bends at the checkout line
Her nipple says *hi*.

*smiles*... Peetster... i love it!

mine are just sappy and more serious... certainly not "better" , "out league-ing" or anything of the sort... (out league-ing?? *laugh*, i have got to stop making up my own words).
i am a serious amatuer... but am also stubborn as hell, and love trying to make it all fit within the rules... *snicker*

thanks... and keep it coming!

:)

Peetser says he’s “not”
Yet his rhymes bring a smile to
Day weary faces

It actually did. :-)

~springrain writes haiku
invented words comes easy...
redefining art.

Meant to be a compliment. :-)

I agree, I think this is a very good haiku. Old form, new tone and language and a unique and abrupt topic. nice.

HiThereDere... re: Peetsters above Haiku... i completely agree...

blending the old and traditional with fresh and new is one of the reasons it fascinates me so...

how 'bout some of your own?? ;)

OK, it breaks the personal pronouns rule, but this came to me at work one day:

Man! This weed is Great!
The last time I was this high
I drooled on my shirt.

My favorite Haiku has got to be Dennis Miller's, though:

The Umbrella drinks
The Master of Sassy jive
Isaac rules the waves

Spring is in the air
Music fills the morning sky
singing is the bird

Mr. Bungle... :)... very good... follows all the guidelines... simple... but paints a clear picture...

thanks!

Animals in Spring

Muscles clench, the grinding two

Love parts as a moan.

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Is this Haiku? I really am unable of deciding for myself.

Sweet calm of silence
plays a sorrowfull part in
end of school freedom

Summer, make me dumb
So I can't speak of the pain
of Winter, Fall, Spring

Summer laze and haze
Makes writing Haikus take long
When brain takes long naps

Nature needs some shade
from a brutal, savage sun.
Too Much ripening.

I wrote this one a while ago

Sun rises on
Snow covered car
So cold

I just took the German lyrics from Tool's "Die Eier Von Satan" and made them into a quasi-haiku for this one. I know it ain't mine, but if you know German, it's kinda funny and stupid


Eine halbe Tasse
Staubzucker
und keine Eier

English translation:

One half cup
powdered sugar
and no eggs

See? No sense at all.

one haiku involving TFP's money situation inspired my peetster

give them your money
without all your donations
we will surely die.

far up in slow hills
dream of smoke city dancing
lately, without pills

bobdobbs... excellent imagery.... i love it... :)

Haiku comes easy,
in this lonely edge of town.
Queens of the Stone Age
blares raucous from the t.v.
Ah, it's some repeat.

Nature deviates for me.

As I welcome rules
I detest iron structure.
but it feels so good.

What? No -"Him Her I, Me You"?

Begin to describe
something outside of yourself.

Lazer Tag Was Fun
Met A Girl, Without Her name
Now My Mind Is Lost



My Mind Has Left Me
Bored Beyond Comprehension
The Night Is Wasted...

thank you spring

charlie parker died
from living too much in truth
his shadow blows on

bobdobbs... :)... thank you... and everyone else for sharing in this...

very good haiku above btw... great imagery... simple... captures a snapshot in a wonderful way...

1.
Spring Storms flourish
Souls hide from its fury
Growth has come

2.
With growth blooming
Summers essences bloom within Galaxygirl
Alive and happy

Did I do it right?

PS...I like rules! although it doesn't mean I always follow them.

Five Syllables First
Then use Seven Syllables
Back To Five, You're Done!!


Here's a favorite that a friend wrote a few years ago... :D
Throughout Life I've Learned
Girls Taste Like Potato Chips...
You Can't Eat Just One

(hahaha isnt' that hilarious? haha)

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Just said 2 more to Z while talking to him on AIM.. here they are ;)
(mind you I AM about to go eat some food.

My poetry is
In the form of a Haiku
Isn't it Shibby?

I Really Like Food.
It Is About Time To Eat.
Talk To You Later

i8one2... i love rules too... until i have to follow them... *chuckle*
GakFace... yours... the first one... is my favorite in your post *smile*

great haiku everyone! :)

please keep it coming...

Actually, they are quite good. I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier when I first read them. :-)

Here is one a Japanese friend of mine wrote about me.

http://members.cox.net/rcordan/images/haiku.gif

Transliteration:
a-me-ri-ka-ni
mi-do-ri-me-wo-shi-ta
ri-cha-a- do-zo

Translation:
In America
There is a man who has green-colored eyes
His name is Richard.


While I can write poetry, I'm horrible at keeping track of syllibals so I'm lousy with haiku. Just as my friend can write haiku well, but she has difficulty with any poetry in English.

Game: Diablo 2
Problem: Way Too Many hacks
Solution: New Patch

There is a different way at looking at a Haiku :)

I Made Ten Good Puns...
Then Tried To Win A Contest...
No Pun In Ten did.

:D

I like the Seasons.
My favorite is in May.
Spring Rain is Way cool.

('nuff suckin' up for me :D)

I'm not sure of the rules of the haiku anyway

A smiling TV person
still hurts on the inside
cannot run away

i really like you
the third fall always hurts
not so lucky star

warmth is contrast
to cold which is reality
it bears sadness

rain yields life
yet can also take life
i drive a car

hello all! :)

i've been out of town for the past three days... sorry that i've not responded to you all...

thanks for continuing the thread... it think all of your words are awesome *big smile*

5-7-5, right? here it goes:

Pouring rain today-
A drenched, alone homeless man-
I took his money.

Another one:

A lost little girl-
Searching for dad, tears in eyes-
I peed on her head.

Don't take offense now-
My haikus aren't serious-
Just a light doggerel.

Lots of great Haiku here, there's a seperate term for poems that fit the 5-7-5 form, but don't use seasonal references, I just can't remember it right now. That being said here are a few of mine:

I'll just lay my head
on a grassy pillow
and watch the clouds pass

(yeah the second line has 6 syllables, sometimes you have to sacrifice rules for beauty)

Skeletons of trees
give to the october wind
Winter's coming soon

If I told Basho
how much I hated nature
he'd kick my ass hard

(Basho was the first haiku poet)

birds on the feeder
blissful little featherbrains
how i envy them

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what dark hole is this
that eats light and belches tears
give us back our joy

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tangled green branches
twined like lovers' raptured limbs
it is not fall yet

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Strawberries and cream?
Yesterday grief, tomorrow
grief. Enjoy today.

metal, smacking me
upside the head. blackness. pain.
i am being mugged.

breaks personal rule, but ah well

I Am The "Nice Guy"
They Say, 'Nice Guys Finish Last'....
When Will The Race End?

Its Our Hidden Gift.
We All Have One True Purpose,
Z, You Have Found Yours.

My New Computer.
Finally We May Rejoice!
It Shall Be Built SOON!

My Haiku Title.
Somtimes It Is My First Line.
I Think It Is Neat.

Good Night! and Farewell!
I Have Work In The Morning...
So Now I Must Sleep.

that made me laugh so hard i am surprised my parents haven't come to see ifi cracked up :)

tfp so full of porn
the beautiful women are so damned beautiful
my keyboard rises on lap

(i couldn't resist. sorry)

excellent. and thanks, btw.

:D

Welcome one and all
To my haiku that I wrote
Dear God, I need porn

must play WarCraft3
the expansion pack i own
so lonely by self

-teardrop-

porn, how I love you!
blowjobs, lesbians, much more!
porn, you I adore

Surely you've seen these
Some are good, some not so good
rules schmules, still funny

http://tfproject.org/tfp/showthread....threadid=20748

writing haikus-fun
making them literary
is not so much fun!

darkness blinds
purpose gone
searching

last moments of life
a leaf clings then falls to earth
to be born anew

those are great *warm smile*

costello... i especially like how you brought in the nature aspect, and touch on such a human experience as well... :)

here is one of Willow's...

sitting quietly
harvest moon kissing your face
i am lost in you

My History work
Eats me up from the inside
50 years ago.

love haikus but not good at them
write so i can read

last night I was hot
pressed against the heater
and a pretty girl

I'd post mine here, but I'd rather just post them in my literature thread "One Night" along with everything else I write.
I have a thing for haikus as well. When I write one, it takes me hours to work it out to where it has the right words, sounds, and meaning.

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skier... nice *soft smile*... thanks... i'd like to see more...

i dont like the drugs
they mayke me feel like woozy
dont send in the clowns

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I've got my own thread of haiku, but I figured a community effort might be appreciated...

Stillness abounding
Dripping silence of spring rain
Purity anew

it is very much appreciated!
that is very good... i am impressed... *warm smile*

thanks... i'll be sure to check out your thread...

Opening old thread
Haiku I cannot resist
Is this called a bump?

I found a series
of haiku I wrote last year
I thought I would share.

When I get upset
With myself for being late
Love brings me ice cream

Nick is drunk again
Tonight he hugs a bucket
Leaves for Europe soon

Escape from prison
Only for a little while
But god, it’s worth it

And Pink Floyd had screamed
“The worms ate into his brain”
As the wall fell down

Threw the sky away
I didn’t wish to see it
Now I miss the sun

Clock ticks overhead
Pen taps against blank pages
Another test failed

She dances with stars
A nebulaic dancer
That will not come down

graceful faeries dannce
upon waterlily beds
a moonlit ballroom

Inside Joke
giant spiders prey
on little girls drinking tea
mongoose saves the day

Bacardi Breezers
It only takes two
For me to tell a stranger
How I look naked.

Still, the leaves ponder
Then the wind of spring arrives
cool, now the leaves dance

In tilted nonsense
the haiku are silliest
no credit for posts

(ah, so what, I dig silly)

Oh man! Is there allready a nonsense thread active?

On the pitch he stands
My eyes delight in his form
No act but in dreams