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Old 06-03-2003, 11:58 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Haiku thread anyone?

While i usually detest writing poetry within rules and contraints... i admit to having a strange love affair with Haiku.

just wondering if there are any others out there like me... and anyone who might be interesting in sharing...

for a general overview of the most basic Haiku "rules"
click here http://www.rit.edu/~dpalyka/Haiku.html#howtowritehaiku

that said... on to the Haiku...

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young flowers blossom
rain falls nourishing the earth
life is all around
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any takers?
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Old 06-03-2003, 12:04 PM   #2 (permalink)
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That's pretty good.

Gray skies in the spring
The baseball game is on hold...
TFP all day.
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Old 06-03-2003, 12:08 PM   #3 (permalink)
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*broad smile*... i LOVE it!

thanks
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Old 06-03-2003, 03:00 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm trying to think
Of a whitty spring haiku
I can find nothing


xXxEmptyxXx
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Old 06-03-2003, 03:41 PM   #5 (permalink)
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*grin*... very good...

thanks for posting... more to come
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Old 06-03-2003, 03:56 PM   #6 (permalink)
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this breaks the "try not to use personal pronouns rule"... but i wrote it for Willow... so i wanted to share...
*stupid gushy smile*

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In quiet places
your voice finds me, filling up
the empty spaces

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Old 06-03-2003, 03:57 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Does GakFace Like Poems?
Not Really, But Then Again...
I Do Like Haikus
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Old 06-03-2003, 04:03 PM   #8 (permalink)
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~springrain, I am clearly not in your league. You are actually good.

Spring fashions afire...
Grrl bends at the checkout line
Her nipple says *hi*.
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Old 06-03-2003, 04:12 PM   #9 (permalink)
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*smiles*... Peetster... i love it!

mine are just sappy and more serious... certainly not "better" , "out league-ing" or anything of the sort... (out league-ing?? *laugh*, i have got to stop making up my own words).
i am a serious amatuer... but am also stubborn as hell, and love trying to make it all fit within the rules... *snicker*

thanks... and keep it coming!
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Old 06-03-2003, 04:17 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Peetser says he’s “not”
Yet his rhymes bring a smile to
Day weary faces
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Old 06-03-2003, 07:48 PM   #11 (permalink)
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It actually did. :-)
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Old 06-03-2003, 07:55 PM   #12 (permalink)
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~springrain writes haiku
invented words comes easy...
redefining art.

Meant to be a compliment. :-)
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Old 06-03-2003, 09:35 PM   #13 (permalink)
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Originally posted by Peetster

Spring fashions afire...
Grrl bends at the checkout line
Her nipple says *hi*.
I agree, I think this is a very good haiku. Old form, new tone and language and a unique and abrupt topic. nice.
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Old 06-04-2003, 04:16 AM   #14 (permalink)
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HiThereDere... re: Peetsters above Haiku... i completely agree...

blending the old and traditional with fresh and new is one of the reasons it fascinates me so...

how 'bout some of your own??
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Old 06-04-2003, 04:23 AM   #15 (permalink)
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OK, it breaks the personal pronouns rule, but this came to me at work one day:

Man! This weed is Great!
The last time I was this high
I drooled on my shirt.

My favorite Haiku has got to be Dennis Miller's, though:

The Umbrella drinks
The Master of Sassy jive
Isaac rules the waves
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Old 06-04-2003, 04:31 AM   #16 (permalink)
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Spring is in the air
Music fills the morning sky
singing is the bird
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Old 06-04-2003, 05:46 AM   #17 (permalink)
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Mr. Bungle... ... very good... follows all the guidelines... simple... but paints a clear picture...

thanks!
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Old 06-04-2003, 06:57 PM   #18 (permalink)
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Animals in Spring

Muscles clench, the grinding two

Love parts as a moan.
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Old 06-04-2003, 11:05 PM   #19 (permalink)
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Old 06-06-2003, 07:42 PM   #20 (permalink)
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Is this Haiku? I really am unable of deciding for myself.

Sweet calm of silence
plays a sorrowfull part in
end of school freedom
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Old 06-06-2003, 08:47 PM   #21 (permalink)
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Summer, make me dumb
So I can't speak of the pain
of Winter, Fall, Spring

Summer laze and haze
Makes writing Haikus take long
When brain takes long naps
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Old 06-07-2003, 12:20 AM   #22 (permalink)
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Nature needs some shade
from a brutal, savage sun.
Too Much ripening.
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Old 06-09-2003, 11:23 AM   #23 (permalink)
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I wrote this one a while ago

Sun rises on
Snow covered car
So cold

I just took the German lyrics from Tool's "Die Eier Von Satan" and made them into a quasi-haiku for this one. I know it ain't mine, but if you know German, it's kinda funny and stupid


Eine halbe Tasse
Staubzucker
und keine Eier

English translation:

One half cup
powdered sugar
and no eggs

See? No sense at all.
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Old 06-14-2003, 02:13 PM   #24 (permalink)
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one haiku involving TFP's money situation inspired my peetster

give them your money
without all your donations
we will surely die.
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Old 06-14-2003, 05:09 PM   #25 (permalink)
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Old 06-14-2003, 06:42 PM   #26 (permalink)
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bobdobbs... excellent imagery.... i love it...
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Old 06-14-2003, 08:03 PM   #27 (permalink)
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Haiku comes easy,
in this lonely edge of town.
Queens of the Stone Age
blares raucous from the t.v.
Ah, it's some repeat.

Nature deviates for me.

As I welcome rules
I detest iron structure.
but it feels so good.

What? No -"Him Her I, Me You"?

Begin to describe
something outside of yourself.

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Old 06-16-2003, 07:28 PM   #28 (permalink)
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Now My Mind Is Lost



My Mind Has Left Me
Bored Beyond Comprehension
The Night Is Wasted...
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Old 06-16-2003, 11:07 PM   #29 (permalink)
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Old 06-16-2003, 11:12 PM   #30 (permalink)
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Old 06-17-2003, 04:15 AM   #31 (permalink)
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bobdobbs... ... thank you... and everyone else for sharing in this...

very good haiku above btw... great imagery... simple... captures a snapshot in a wonderful way...
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Old 06-17-2003, 08:18 AM   #32 (permalink)
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1.
Spring Storms flourish
Souls hide from its fury
Growth has come

2.
With growth blooming
Summers essences bloom within Galaxygirl
Alive and happy

Did I do it right?

PS...I like rules! although it doesn't mean I always follow them.
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Old 06-17-2003, 03:36 PM   #33 (permalink)
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Five Syllables First
Then use Seven Syllables
Back To Five, You're Done!!


Here's a favorite that a friend wrote a few years ago...
Throughout Life I've Learned
Girls Taste Like Potato Chips...
You Can't Eat Just One

(hahaha isnt' that hilarious? haha)

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Just said 2 more to Z while talking to him on AIM.. here they are
(mind you I AM about to go eat some food.

My poetry is
In the form of a Haiku
Isn't it Shibby?

I Really Like Food.
It Is About Time To Eat.
Talk To You Later
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Old 06-17-2003, 03:58 PM   #34 (permalink)
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i8one2... i love rules too... until i have to follow them... *chuckle*
GakFace... yours... the first one... is my favorite in your post *smile*

great haiku everyone!

please keep it coming...

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Old 06-17-2003, 04:00 PM   #35 (permalink)
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In the dark of night
bound tight in a safe cocoon
safely numbed by sleep

the soul can transform
dreams into reality
bringing You to me
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Old 06-19-2003, 06:15 PM   #36 (permalink)
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Originally posted by b00bman69
Damn, my haiku's must really be bad...
Actually, they are quite good. I'm sorry I didn't reply earlier when I first read them. :-)
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Old 06-19-2003, 07:22 PM   #37 (permalink)
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Here is one a Japanese friend of mine wrote about me.



Transliteration:
a-me-ri-ka-ni
mi-do-ri-me-wo-shi-ta
ri-cha-a- do-zo

Translation:
In America
There is a man who has green-colored eyes
His name is Richard.


While I can write poetry, I'm horrible at keeping track of syllibals so I'm lousy with haiku. Just as my friend can write haiku well, but she has difficulty with any poetry in English.
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Old 06-20-2003, 04:33 PM   #38 (permalink)
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Problem: Way Too Many hacks
Solution: New Patch

There is a different way at looking at a Haiku

I Made Ten Good Puns...
Then Tried To Win A Contest...
No Pun In Ten did.



I like the Seasons.
My favorite is in May.
Spring Rain is Way cool.

('nuff suckin' up for me )
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Old 06-20-2003, 06:01 PM   #39 (permalink)
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I'm not sure of the rules of the haiku anyway

A smiling TV person
still hurts on the inside
cannot run away
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Old 06-20-2003, 06:03 PM   #40 (permalink)
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i really like you
the third fall always hurts
not so lucky star
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