Giltwist

(As Howling Back was modeled after Ginsberg's Howl, this is modeled after John Berryman's Dream Songs. Here are the first 77 Dream Songs. I am very tempted to see if I can't extend this into a more complete story arc, if such can be said to be done with this sort of contemporary poetry.)

Gallant he said they shackled
with our lovely demons the future
of my memoirs. Fleeting the real
truth upward like eyes sheared
for cathedrals.

Drew were the wedding fires
unhinged crying for ginger
clout. Yes Lord of Unbroken
then here stands drunk on
sunset rides.

Welcome circular in jaundice
those effluvia purchased naked
dew reworded. Huge nectar
quiet hubris. Lily bird inking
forgetful soldiers.

amonkie

I actually read all 77 (wow!) , and I can see the influence in your poem. The second stanza, I think, is the strongest one, but there seems to be enough random details to tie together a story. I'll be keeping an eye out for it!

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