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mb99usa · 11-05-2003, 08:37 AM

I'm going to keep updating this thread with new material as it comes to me. Please feel free to add any comments or critiques.

Sliding

Sliding into the abyss
blackness surrounds
never to return

She looked at me with disgust in her eyes
could not believe the way things had changed
looking to grow
looking to love

Sliding into the abyss
blackness surrounds
never to return

I never meant to hurt her
I never meant to cause this pain
I was only looking for love
I was only looking to grow

Sliding into the abyss
blackness surrounds
never to return

She screamed
the knife flashed
never got to explain

Sliding into the abyss
blackness surrounds
never to return

losthellhound · 11-05-2003, 05:17 PM

amazing. This has to be my favorite of your work..

J.R.V.A. · 11-06-2003, 05:13 AM

I like this too. Thanks for sharing

mb99usa · 11-06-2003, 06:09 AM

Thanks for the compliments. I'll keep posting more in this thread.

mb99usa · 11-06-2003, 07:27 AM

can't see in front of me
can't see behind me
clouded with confusion

which way is up
which way is down
i just want to find direction
i just want to find my way

can't see in front of me
can't see behind me
clouded with confusion

mystery surrounds me
the unknown haunts me
i'm searching
i'm discovering

can't see in front of me
can't see behind me
clouded with confusion

but the discovery is hollow
the search is never-ending
even when the unknown is known
mystery surrounds it

can't see in front of me
can't see behind me
clouded with confusion

J.R.V.A. · 11-06-2003, 07:46 AM

Good stuff, I really like this
"even when the unknown is known"
Thanks for sharing

SSJwrestler · 11-06-2003, 08:34 PM

im liking it

mb99usa · 11-10-2003, 07:31 AM

Cruel and intolerable
just and true
Honesty
The fabric life is waved from
each thread adding to the strength
of the previous
Needed
never devious or fake
unflinching in truth
Honesty
For those that follow its path
rewards abound
friendships made
relationships hardened
A life unburdened
of guilt, deceit, failure
Honesty
the only true road to success

mb99usa · 11-11-2003, 10:48 AM

I've lost a friend
I don't know where she is gone
I don't know why she is gone

I've lost a friend
I know she is still here
I know she is not responding

I've lost a friend
Did I ever really have her
Was she ever really a friend

I've lost a friend
Can you help me find her
Can you help me start over

I've lost a friend
Could be forever
Could be she is not gone

MAybe I haven't lost a friend
Maybe she is busy
Maybe she has technical difficulties

Will I ever know
For now she is lost

Averett · 11-17-2003, 07:21 AM

How'd I miss those last two?

Very good, I like them

mb99usa · 11-17-2003, 08:56 AM

Zip.

The steady stream bursts forth
slamming the porcelain with such force
going, going
slowly letting up
the last few drops tinkling into the bowl

Zip
Flush

Ah, sweet relief

Averett · 11-17-2003, 03:01 PM

Ha! I love it!

mb99usa · 11-18-2003, 06:03 AM

Traffic slows
flashing lights appear
off to the right
other side of the road
a faint trail of smoke
rising from the tree-line

Ambulances, fire trucks, and police
the emergency triumverate

And there it lays
on its side in the grass
roof crushed
blackened by the fire
looks to have once been a Dodge
a painful end for a strong truck

Never saw the driver
did they live
did they die
been there, done that
flashes through my mind
I can laugh about it
but can they

It's officially called Technology Corridor
but to those that drive it
brave it every day
it is known as
Accident Alley
we have all seen them flipped and burned
we have all met the emergency triumverate

Based on the aftermath of an accident I saw this morning. I really have been there before, I got lucky there was no fire when mine happened.

mb99usa · 11-21-2003, 09:53 AM

Cold gleaming steel
shiny flashing chrome
the curves so flowing
the heart so strong
the feel is that
of a taught body
the look is that
of the naked female form
so exciting
so dangerous
and then it purrs
but to hear it roar
is the real thrill
to feel it vibrate
the power
the strength
the speed

mb99usa · 02-10-2004, 06:01 AM

As the streetlamps begin to light
And the darkness begins its nightly descent
The oldies play on the radio
Like some movie scene the small-town dusk activities begin
The rush from the fields and factories to home or bar
Windows begin to light
As the streets shut-down and the wind begins to blow
A feeling creeps in
Desolate and desparate
Now is when the Nocturnals begin to stir

11-05-2003, 08:37 AM	#1 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Just some writing I'm going to keep updating this thread with new material as it comes to me. Please feel free to add any comments or critiques. Sliding Sliding into the abyss blackness surrounds never to return She looked at me with disgust in her eyes could not believe the way things had changed looking to grow looking to love Sliding into the abyss blackness surrounds never to return I never meant to hurt her I never meant to cause this pain I was only looking for love I was only looking to grow Sliding into the abyss blackness surrounds never to return She screamed the knife flashed never got to explain Sliding into the abyss blackness surrounds never to return __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-05-2003, 05:17 PM	#2 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	amazing. This has to be my favorite of your work.. __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-06-2003, 05:13 AM	#3 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	I like this too. Thanks for sharing __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-06-2003, 06:09 AM	#4 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Thanks for the compliments. I'll keep posting more in this thread. __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-06-2003, 07:27 AM	#5 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Confusion can't see in front of me can't see behind me clouded with confusion which way is up which way is down i just want to find direction i just want to find my way can't see in front of me can't see behind me clouded with confusion mystery surrounds me the unknown haunts me i'm searching i'm discovering can't see in front of me can't see behind me clouded with confusion but the discovery is hollow the search is never-ending even when the unknown is known mystery surrounds it can't see in front of me can't see behind me clouded with confusion __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-06-2003, 07:46 AM	#6 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Good stuff, I really like this "even when the unknown is known" Thanks for sharing __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-06-2003, 08:34 PM	#7 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	im liking it

11-10-2003, 07:31 AM	#8 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Honesty Cruel and intolerable just and true Honesty The fabric life is waved from each thread adding to the strength of the previous Needed never devious or fake unflinching in truth Honesty For those that follow its path rewards abound friendships made relationships hardened A life unburdened of guilt, deceit, failure Honesty the only true road to success __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-11-2003, 10:48 AM	#9 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Lost I've lost a friend I don't know where she is gone I don't know why she is gone I've lost a friend I know she is still here I know she is not responding I've lost a friend Did I ever really have her Was she ever really a friend I've lost a friend Can you help me find her Can you help me start over I've lost a friend Could be forever Could be she is not gone MAybe I haven't lost a friend Maybe she is busy Maybe she has technical difficulties Will I ever know For now she is lost __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-17-2003, 07:21 AM	#10 (permalink)
Averett Is In Love Location: I'm workin' on it	How'd I miss those last two? Very good, I like them __________________ Absence is to love what wind is to fire. It extinguishes the small, it enkindles the great.

11-17-2003, 08:56 AM	#11 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Relief Zip. The steady stream bursts forth slamming the porcelain with such force going, going slowly letting up the last few drops tinkling into the bowl Zip Flush Ah, sweet relief __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-17-2003, 03:01 PM	#12 (permalink)
Averett Is In Love Location: I'm workin' on it	Ha! I love it! __________________ Absence is to love what wind is to fire. It extinguishes the small, it enkindles the great.

11-18-2003, 06:03 AM	#13 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Flipped and Burned Traffic slows flashing lights appear off to the right other side of the road a faint trail of smoke rising from the tree-line Ambulances, fire trucks, and police the emergency triumverate And there it lays on its side in the grass roof crushed blackened by the fire looks to have once been a Dodge a painful end for a strong truck Never saw the driver did they live did they die been there, done that flashes through my mind I can laugh about it but can they It's officially called Technology Corridor but to those that drive it brave it every day it is known as Accident Alley we have all seen them flipped and burned we have all met the emergency triumverate Based on the aftermath of an accident I saw this morning. I really have been there before, I got lucky there was no fire when mine happened. __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

11-21-2003, 09:53 AM	#14 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Chopper Cold gleaming steel shiny flashing chrome the curves so flowing the heart so strong the feel is that of a taught body the look is that of the naked female form so exciting so dangerous and then it purrs but to hear it roar is the real thrill to feel it vibrate the power the strength the speed __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.

02-10-2004, 06:01 AM	#15 (permalink)
mb99usa Keep on rolling. It only hurts for a little while. Location: wherever I am	Nocturnals As the streetlamps begin to light And the darkness begins its nightly descent The oldies play on the radio Like some movie scene the small-town dusk activities begin The rush from the fields and factories to home or bar Windows begin to light As the streets shut-down and the wind begins to blow A feeling creeps in Desolate and desparate Now is when the Nocturnals begin to stir __________________ So, what's your point? It's not an attitude, it's a way of life.