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I like this, its filled with great fragments which you should pick out when you revise. also, the whole poem tries to maintain this measured but quick, frenetic pace, which I think you should try to build up to instead, a crescendo - maybe by breaking this up into three stanzas, with the breaks between these two lines: "& i’m feeling rejection, i’m not one of them. / Everythings confusing, i don’t know where to begin,"
and the third one beginning at: "Every door is locked, there’s no progression".
This way the second stanza, which goes internal to you and describes the turmoil within can be more quick paced to add to the description and sentiment.
Anyways, these are just my suggestions which probably aren't something you should pay too much attention to. I like the work though, keep it up.
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