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Originally posted by Jimmy4
That last one was ok, but at some parts it just fell apart. Like: That part just kinda killed the flow IMO. The beginning is pretty good though, it had a real good flow going, which is hard to do.
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What do you mean by it lost the flow at that part? I am asking cause I am not sure if I like it either, I am basically saying that, that person is a run away train not knowing where he's going...And I am on a track where I know exactly where I'm going....
I am more concerned with this part of the verse here
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I ask the crowd to become silent
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There was nothing after that, That really went good with it...Any suggestions?