My own Hip Hop Lyrics - Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 05:49 PM

Ok...I am making this thread for Hip Hop fans that have a love for the music...I just recently started to scribble down my own lyrics...I am asking for honest opinions from hip hop fans and anybody else...If you don't like it say so in a nice way or make a suggestion on what would fit better. All compliments & Suggestions are welcome

Thanks go out to K-Wise for helping me out on changing little things to give it a nicer flow...Not all of the lyrics have been edited or moved around...these are just...Rough copy's I guess you could call them....Straight from my mind to the pages of TFP.

Now these are not full Track lyrics...More like Battle ryhmes...I am gonna post what I have got so far..but I don't know if I consider these complete or not.

K-Wise...Feel free to post your own shit here too and any other MC's that are writing ryhmes...I do not consider myself an actual MC...But the past few hours I have been writing alot of shit down and find myself getting addicted to it.

So Remember..Don't bring the hate if you can't relate.

Ok here's the first one

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Yo...This Mind & pen got the skillz to end life...You want a piece of me I burn you like a bag of weed to the fullest degree...Makin you wish you never Challenged thee....I stay undetected..Then at first given chance I snap necks with flow that I represent...makin sure you feel this...Burn into your mind and feel my infectious ryhmes take full effect..Letting you know you a amatuer and I'm the vet.
I'm a cure & disease...Fuckin you up verbally..Mentally & Introvenously..with the words I speak.
I'm a cure for the MC's with a dream...Come follow in my footsteps and have a shot at the King.

Next one

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I got the recipe for success, Keepin it real at all times and don't let money infect the mind...spit the ill shit that real hiphop heads expect...collect as much respect that you can get...Passion comes first..Money comes last..Do it in that order or your going knowhere fast...I want the whole world to witness this...I'm furious...grab the mic and give your best shot...I'm ready and got my shit cocked, This mic is like an automatic weapon..It's pointing in your direction..I don't need no infared beam to hit you..My ryhmes are heat sinking they will penetrate and go right through you...I hold it to your head tempted to Squeeze...I spit like a heavyweight hits..Making you bleed..One more ryhme from me and you will wish this was all a dream...What? You want more...That was just a tease, I will penetrate your Mug and chest with much ease...Your having a hard time breathing..I can tell...You start to lose all feeling...keepin it real son sendin you straight to hell...

I am a new breed...Peeps never heard of me they all try to step to thee..illest MC, Trying to phase IC3...You step up and get smacked down..I don't fuck around, bring a better sound next time your in my town...I smoke you like i smoke a spliff..Understand I am the man with the talented gift...You just another punk tryin to earn respect..I stab you in the face with my lit ciggarette...I got a 9 that will allow me to see the inside of your mind.

Last one for now

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Check this...I see you wanna battle me, Step up..I don't take no resonsibility of the actions I make..Your risking your life against a Venomous Snake..I will stalk you, makin you freeze in 1 spot..You wanna move & run but you can't cause I got it locked...When you least expect I will Beam my Poisonous venom into your blood stream...you start to hallucinate..seeing things that only your mind can create...I just gave you a sample of what could end your life..Ask for mercy and thou shall recieve, Now you have 1 more chance at battling thee.

that's currently what I have...I am just sharing this to get other Hip Hop Heads Opinions on it...If you think it's not that great, Then fine...But say it in a nice way.

Thanks...There will be more to come soon.

I would really like if other people shared there hip hop lryics here also.

BigGov · 08-30-2003, 06:32 PM

Battle rhymes are better if they're 100% improv. They're better that way because they can be taylored to be an attack at they guy you're facing.

Not saying it's easy, but stick at it. Snoop honed his skills at his high school where his friend would point to something, anything, and Snoop would rap about it.

If ya got the 8 Mile DVD, there's a section where there are four people who are battling him in scenes that are kinda for fun, might be in the movie. Eminem is supposed to just mime everything because his voice was gone and he couldn't talk well. The first guy went as planned, the second time though, the crowd started booing Em, he said screw it, turned his mic on, and destroyed everyone he faced 100% improv.

But like I said man, keep at it, the only way you improve is by doing it.

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 06:39 PM

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Originally posted by Jimmy4
Battle rhymes are better if they're 100% improv. They're better that way because they can be taylored to be an attack at they guy you're facing.

Not saying it's easy, but stick at it. Snoop honed his skills at his high school where his friend would point to something, anything, and Snoop would rap about it.

If ya got the 8 Mile DVD, there's a section where there are four people who are battling him in scenes that are kinda for fun, might be in the movie. Eminem is supposed to just mime everything because his voice was gone and he couldn't talk well. The first guy went as planned, the second time though, the crowd started booing Em, he said screw it, turned his mic on, and destroyed everyone he faced 100% improv.

But like I said man, keep at it, the only way you improve is by doing it.

Thanks man..My intentions are not for these to be battle raps, But they just have the same sound as battle raps...Doing it freestyle is extremly hard..Or atleast i think it is...Actually I guess these are battle raps in a way...I just like the sound of battle raps...I am gonna try some new styles and see how it goes later on, But I am having fun with this style right now.

Whatever comes into my head I will scribble it down then just touch it up.

thanks for reading it..and giving advice.

K-Wise · 08-30-2003, 07:55 PM

Battle rhymes don't necessarily have to be improv to be better but it is more impressive to be able to freestyle off the top. But battle rhymes don't necessarily have to be directed at any one person imparticular. Like Canibus or Chino XL for example. Me I used to be all about em but battle lyrics tire after a while and I look to write something with depth. Heres an example of what I'm talkin bout

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Yo

Somewhere off in the grips of space there exists a place encased in hate and love at a simultaneous state//and hope reverberates upon the wings of grace to the eyes and ears of children raped or mentally scared and hurt in different ways to wipe their tears and help them think of better days//Where the cool air can hit your face and life is looked upon a different gaze with the coming age you realize that somethings changed and some things change//Nothings the same and no thing's the same except for reminiscent thoughts at play soon there comes a day when you will reminisce your thoughts away//But not before the phaze you fight the haze away in righteous ways an evermoving crazed iconoclast enraged by all the worlds hypocracy(ay)//And a childs eyes can bleed the truth so honestly but yet they're awefully condemned to what is wrong today so much it's hard to find a way for the world to raise them harmlessly especially when parents neglect to bring them up responsibly//Confused asking "What is wrong with me?" nothing is wrong with thee you've just been wrongfully informed of what is honorably//Think remarkably a fetus should never be brought up to think defeatus instead of realizing the uniqueness that is bestoyed upon in each us, "I and I" yo, we all are equals//To each his is what they teach us but in this world full a teachers no one is learning how will they reach us? Needless the question is asked and all are speechless too many questions not enough answers e’ll turn to reefer or to Jesus//Either way you’ll question either way when certainty became a slave of vague and certain days ya caught between the rage and bitter cold disconsolate//Got ta concentrate says “Whats his face” and all ya left to face is to embrace what is ya destined fate//And when the words of hate e’ll make ya soul a feel of desolate ya never break and hold it as a test a strength//And though it hurts so whats in the dust goes, and dies slow yo so just know what lives in dirt grows, throughout the bitter colds, stronger than that of which hurts most//Too often too eager to suffer the meager to the reaper cause we either too jaded or blinded to know we’re weaker cause bashin rather than understandin seems easier than acknowledgin that we’re feebler//A blatant disregard for others the sons a bitches we curse brothers more often the sons a lovin n carin mothers//And thus the just suffer just cause a the way that the fucks cover our motha earth in a hearse of perverse blunder//Damn son it's not a wonder...

Yo in all a lifes lessons manifestin whether blessin or depression
WE GOT QUESTIONS...
Mind stressin on the suffers of ya brethren only recollection is Indeed
WE GOT QUESTIONS...
Why me? Why she? Why we? Best believe it seems WE GOT QUESTIONS

But wheres the answers?...Hey yo I said wheres the answers?

Those are some of my own. Kinda on some Def Poetry type shit. I wanted to write and I wanted it to be deep and thats what came out. Not finished yet still needs another verse. That ones leanin to more towards the bit of abstract style of hip-hop ya see in cats like Sage Francis and Aesop Rock. Although not nearly as abstract as them.

Well now about IC3's rhymes...well ya know what I think of them already. I'm a pretty nifty freestyler myself and I'll tell ya this....It can't be taught but basically after you've been writing a while freestyling comes very easy. Not because you're spitting writtens but because after writing for years you already know what words rhyme without even having to think about it it just comes instinctively. It comes with practice and you'll never get good at it unless ya try it. Cause you can't always spit writtens cause unless you have one of those gifted type of natural flows, not every rhyme you write will be on beat with just any instrumental.

Asta!!

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 08:07 PM

That is pretty deep K-Wise..I'm feeling that...I am not sure if I could just write an actual track without thier being hints of battle raps though...Not that I don't like that type of sound...It's just harder to write something like you just posted.

Anyways, I like that..I wanna hear some of your other styles also when you have a chance to post them.

Thanks.

K-Wise · 08-30-2003, 08:32 PM

Yeah I agree it really is harder. I've been workin on that one for a while now changing around every little thing sometimes erasing whole bars and starting them all over. Now the battle stuff yeah I've written a lot of it and I became pretty prestigious for it. Heres a battle verse I wrote a while back in a Crew battle against a guy named Ignorant Prodigy, who's crew was Arrestin Peace. Proof that a rhyme ain't gotta be freestyled to be good.

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Here it is
DEATH TO THE IGNORANT

Ugh Checkit the verbal method burst in rages outragous//ya heart races left in worried faces this is just the basics//can't be stopped by bars or cages Billy make ya famous magazines and newspapers find no traces once bloodshed commence on stages against such a nameless ignoramus//verbal raptor massacre this feeble actor ya verses cause burst of laughter simply after I release this written chapter//I collapse ya lungs like trash compactors if you try to reach my point of stature attackin wit the power of a nuclear reactor movin faster then the naked eye can capture//this is just my simple notion all you bitches(AP) braggin boastin turn to shit once my mouth is open and these words are spoken//ya words are chokin body broken by this simple token you will stop provokin once you notice death approachin//you shall cease to exist once a midst the forbidden scripts of this lyricist you dare entice I'm pissed I dismiss this bitch PUNCHin bricks(me) wit loosely gripped glass fists//my true skill hide subliminal behind this minimal percent of shown lyrical that slays this feeble individual//I advise to check ya visual when up against such a critical array of skill clearly not dismissible battlin hard invincible at my pinnacle ya skill is simply minuscule decreasin fast until ya ass is hardly visable//the verbal damages ya left in all shades of Amethyst underneath the bandages lies an Ignorant bitch that slowly famishes faced against the wisdom I'm commandin this attackin with the outlandishness that could turn an anarchist into a pacifist//my rap percist and after this Christopher Reeves will show more activeness//verbal crackin ribs ya body collapse and shifts while I remain tighter than virgin women activists//My spit release like blood of slashin wrists from troubled adolescent kids label wack, wacker, and wackest bitch ya full amount of adjectives//ya think ya competition? one verse that I'm conductin leaves ya chances slim like 3rd world children after liposuction//leave ya ego shrunken just a lil sumfin sumfin for all you cocky bitches buggin I could give a mothafuckin...//I was summoned with death forth comin all this waist of time redundant(I didn't need to type this much) against a rap repugnant all arise the beefs abundant

//remove ya brain surgically before battle it's an urgency you have yet to burden me unaware of I obviously ya name fits you perfectly (Ignorant)//go back to your Arrestin Piece of fecal matter wit all the chitter chatter about how you bitches badder you couldn't reach my level along the top of Joshua's ladder//I arise a problem in ya blatter all you chickens dipped and battered nothings sadder then watchin bitches shatter//battle Knowledge cardiac Arrest in Peace now and forever after!!!

BYE NOW

Just ta give you an example of my different types of writting. Thats just copied and pasted from the site I posted it at a while back in its entirety exactly as it was in the post. Hope ya like it.

Asta!!

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 09:05 PM

I just finished this one..

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August 3rd 78...My release date..Dead Straight, First thing on my mind was to create..This illmatic flow that i throw makin most peeps hate that I got you nodding your head to my tape...They mad cause I got connections to the top, But I rather stay down here keeping the real hip hopper's bop...So check my flow, it's the first time you hear in it..Oh ya.. let your boys know so they can expierence it....I'm like a hit from the bong, I'll be in your mind all night long.

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 09:10 PM

Holy shit K-wise, That's some serious ryhmes...That's some crazy ass ryhmes...How can you go on for so long, i can only write little skit type ryhmes...I am gonna try making something longer next time and see what i come up with.

That is some serious shit though

I like that alot.

K-Wise · 08-30-2003, 09:42 PM

Thanx. I'm glad you like them. Yer last two rhymes are gettin better.

Asta!!

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 10:08 PM

Thanks..I keep reading the last set of ryhmes you posted...That's so awsome.

IC3 · 08-30-2003, 11:35 PM

Ok this is an updated version of the last post i made of this verse...I edited a couple things when I was expanding the verse.

Just to let the mods know and you K-Wise, I am not taking shots at anybody, I'm just rymin what i'm thinking.

Just want to make that clear, Thanks.

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August 3rd 78...My release date..Dead Straight, First thing on my mind was to create..This illmatic flow ..that i throw makin most peeps hate that I got you nodding your head to my tape...They mad cause I got connections to the top, But I rather stay down here making the real hip hopper's bop...So check my flow, it's the first time you hearin it..Oh ya.. let your boys know so they can expierence it....I'm like a hit from the bong, I'll be in your mind all night long...Don't try to discriminate, I teach you something that you have never learned, Watch the tip of my mic as it starts to burn...My ryhmes are uncontrolable just watch & be aware..That I am the man you are trying to scare...I always lay low, can never be predicted..I just started doing this shit and I am addicted, So many thoughts go running through my mind of how I think of these ryhmes..I think cause I have let the marijuana get me high..Lava lamp watchin, writin ryhmes...For everybody who hears this, This is the best of times, Letting shit flow to attract my future fans...But those are future plans...I aint going know where I still have fans to attend...I'm feeling a rush of high travelling through my veigns..You know the kind? you can't explain...Be one of the witnesse's who witness this..As I rip through your computers into your basements...I am Enhanced, Leaving people dazed..Feelin like that your trapped in a maze..While I'm waiting at the end..for days & days...I'm like a cheetah and you are my prey...I'm like a dog of it's leash, Do not approach me..I will bite back with maximum force making you dream you was at the airport...One more thing, I want you to know...don't tempt me kid, Cause I will let this gat blow.

-IC3

K-Wise · 08-31-2003, 12:06 AM

Not bad buddy not bad yer gettin the hang of it. Pretty soon yo...I just know.

Asta!!

IC3 · 08-31-2003, 01:12 PM

This one I just finished...believe it or not..It took me about 2 or 3 hours to do this one...I almost gave up on it.

I may go back and add to it later on, But this is what I got for now.

EDIT: I updated this verse..Did not Edit anything.

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Non stop Block Rockin ryhmes, Girls with there panties down with me in mind..Come check this flow that i just designed...I'm way ahead of this present date..Makin me the white boy you love to hate...Let my futuristic ryhmes ingulf your mind...My raps are poisonous they will make you blind...Now you can't see what i'm a do..makin you sweat & nervous cause I'm inside you...Your a run away train with no conductor, Destination unknown..That's a factor...I'm a one man army, let your bombs drop..I will dodge everyone one of them and hit you with my first shot...My skillz are sophisticated..yours are outdated..Kid..You can't relate..I have a million raps to create...it's gotta be clear that after tonights show..You are no longer going to be here...I am the new king, Everytime I ryhme I make history..i stand alone at the top.. you bitch's can't come near me......I thought I got some competition..But instead i'm getting a better reputation..Defeatin foe's with my complications..My style is like gasoline, I spit flames and hear you scream...look me in the eyes when I speak to you...You acting all cool infront of your crew, bring them all up for a taste of this...I will dissect each & every one of your boys you fuckin bitch...I gotta slow down, I'm gettin pissed..Your girl looks good she may
do the trick.

-IC3

BigGov · 08-31-2003, 03:07 PM

That last one was ok, but at some parts it just fell apart. Like:

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Your a run away train with no conductor, Destination unknown..That's a factor...

That part just kinda killed the flow IMO. The beginning is pretty good though, it had a real good flow going, which is hard to do.

IC3 · 08-31-2003, 04:29 PM

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Originally posted by Jimmy4
That last one was ok, but at some parts it just fell apart. Like: That part just kinda killed the flow IMO. The beginning is pretty good though, it had a real good flow going, which is hard to do.

What do you mean by it lost the flow at that part? I am asking cause I am not sure if I like it either, I am basically saying that, that person is a run away train not knowing where he's going...And I am on a track where I know exactly where I'm going....

I am more concerned with this part of the verse here

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I ask the crowd to become silent

There was nothing after that, That really went good with it...Any suggestions?

BigGov · 08-31-2003, 05:52 PM

When I read it I had a good beat in the background. Everything else just flowed, but when you hit that line, it just gets choppy for a little bit. The run away train with no conductor is good, but it starts getting choppy at destination unknown. The words just don't flow like the rest. Then again, that was with a slower Timbaland beat. Read to a faster beat in more of an Eminem fashion it gets by better, but rapping like Eminem is hangs up on the "I ask the crowd to become silent line" You could probably just scrap that line altogether.

IC3 · 08-31-2003, 06:04 PM

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Originally posted by Jimmy4
When I read it I had a good beat in the background. Everything else just flowed, but when you hit that line, it just gets choppy for a little bit. The run away train with no conductor is good, but it starts getting choppy at destination unknown. The words just don't flow like the rest. Then again, that was with a slower Timbaland beat. Read to a faster beat in more of an Eminem fashion it gets by better, but rapping like Eminem is hangs up on the "I ask the crowd to become silent line" You could probably just scrap that line altogether.

Thanks man..Much appreciated, I haven't tried rappin this over a beat yet..And Every verse that I have posted in this thread...I always try to rap it in an Eminem type flow like you mentioned...I am not sure why, but it just seems to go better that way..I guess you feel the same way also.

And I was also thinking about scrapping that line that you mentioned...But since you and K-Wise are the only two leaving comments..I will just go with what you guys think is best, I'm sure K-Wise will say the same thing about that one line being scrapped.

Thanks Again...Do you happen to write any ryhmes yourself? If so, post them here...If you want that is.

Thanks again for the feedback.

BigGov · 08-31-2003, 09:47 PM

Havin a beat always helps, gets ya in the flow, ya feel it and ya know almost right away if it's good or not and what needs fixing.

And nah, I don't write any rhymes, I ain't any good at writing. I'm dabbling a little in beats though, I'll probably get a few real music programs when I get a new computer (a few months off) and actually put together something that doesn't suck

IC3 · 08-31-2003, 09:53 PM

Are you using a computer program for your beats? Or some kind of beat machine?

My friend is suppose to hook me up with Reason with the sound Bank...There's so much shit you can do with that program, Make All kinds of beats...

08-30-2003, 06:32 PM	#2 (permalink)
BigGov WoW or Class... Location: UWW	Battle rhymes are better if they're 100% improv. They're better that way because they can be taylored to be an attack at they guy you're facing. Not saying it's easy, but stick at it. Snoop honed his skills at his high school where his friend would point to something, anything, and Snoop would rap about it. If ya got the 8 Mile DVD, there's a section where there are four people who are battling him in scenes that are kinda for fun, might be in the movie. Eminem is supposed to just mime everything because his voice was gone and he couldn't talk well. The first guy went as planned, the second time though, the crowd started booing Em, he said screw it, turned his mic on, and destroyed everyone he faced 100% improv. But like I said man, keep at it, the only way you improve is by doing it. __________________ One day an Englishman, a Scotsman, and an Irishman walked into a pub together. They each bought a pint of Guinness. Just as they were about to enjoy their creamy beverage, three flies landed in each of their pints. The Englishman pushed his beer away in disgust. The Scotsman fished the fly out of his beer and continued drinking it, as if nothing had happened. The Irishman, too, picked the fly out of his drink but then held it out over the beer and yelled "SPIT IT OUT, SPIT IT OUT, YOU BASTARD!"

08-30-2003, 09:10 PM	#8 (permalink)
IC3 Poison Location: Canada	Holy shit K-wise, That's some serious ryhmes...That's some crazy ass ryhmes...How can you go on for so long, i can only write little skit type ryhmes...I am gonna try making something longer next time and see what i come up with. That is some serious shit though I like that alot. Last edited by IC3; 08-30-2003 at 09:43 PM..

08-30-2003, 09:42 PM	#9 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Thanx. I'm glad you like them. Yer last two rhymes are gettin better. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!

08-30-2003, 10:08 PM	#10 (permalink)
IC3 Poison Location: Canada	Thanks..I keep reading the last set of ryhmes you posted...That's so awsome. Last edited by IC3; 08-30-2003 at 10:41 PM..

08-31-2003, 12:06 AM	#12 (permalink)
K-Wise It's All About The Ass!! Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!	Not bad buddy not bad yer gettin the hang of it. Pretty soon yo...I just know. Asta!! __________________ "I love music and it's my parents fault (closing statement)." - Me..quoting myself...from when I said that...On TFP..thats here...Tilted Forum Project *It ain't goodbye, it's see ya later! I'll miss you guys!* - Asta!!

08-30-2003, 08:07 PM	#5 (permalink)
IC3 Poison Location: Canada	That is pretty deep K-Wise..I'm feeling that...I am not sure if I could just write an actual track without thier being hints of battle raps though...Not that I don't like that type of sound...It's just harder to write something like you just posted. Anyways, I like that..I wanna hear some of your other styles also when you have a chance to post them. Thanks.

08-31-2003, 05:52 PM	#16 (permalink)
BigGov WoW or Class... Location: UWW	When I read it I had a good beat in the background. Everything else just flowed, but when you hit that line, it just gets choppy for a little bit. The run away train with no conductor is good, but it starts getting choppy at destination unknown. The words just don't flow like the rest. Then again, that was with a slower Timbaland beat. Read to a faster beat in more of an Eminem fashion it gets by better, but rapping like Eminem is hangs up on the "I ask the crowd to become silent line" You could probably just scrap that line altogether. __________________ One day an Englishman, a Scotsman, and an Irishman walked into a pub together. They each bought a pint of Guinness. Just as they were about to enjoy their creamy beverage, three flies landed in each of their pints. The Englishman pushed his beer away in disgust. The Scotsman fished the fly out of his beer and continued drinking it, as if nothing had happened. The Irishman, too, picked the fly out of his drink but then held it out over the beer and yelled "SPIT IT OUT, SPIT IT OUT, YOU BASTARD!"

08-31-2003, 09:47 PM	#18 (permalink)
BigGov WoW or Class... Location: UWW	Havin a beat always helps, gets ya in the flow, ya feel it and ya know almost right away if it's good or not and what needs fixing. And nah, I don't write any rhymes, I ain't any good at writing. I'm dabbling a little in beats though, I'll probably get a few real music programs when I get a new computer (a few months off) and actually put together something that doesn't suck __________________ One day an Englishman, a Scotsman, and an Irishman walked into a pub together. They each bought a pint of Guinness. Just as they were about to enjoy their creamy beverage, three flies landed in each of their pints. The Englishman pushed his beer away in disgust. The Scotsman fished the fly out of his beer and continued drinking it, as if nothing had happened. The Irishman, too, picked the fly out of his drink but then held it out over the beer and yelled "SPIT IT OUT, SPIT IT OUT, YOU BASTARD!"

08-31-2003, 09:53 PM	#19 (permalink)
IC3 Poison Location: Canada	Are you using a computer program for your beats? Or some kind of beat machine? My friend is suppose to hook me up with Reason with the sound Bank...There's so much shit you can do with that program, Make All kinds of beats...