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Jaron · 08-23-2003, 12:45 AM

Thanks for sharing, Gremlin.

I actually preferred the first one, because of the rythem that seems to be lacking in the second one. Your style seems to be somewhere between free verse and "normal" four-line stanzas, and it seems to work quite well for you. Your second one, however, lacks the solidarity, seeming to be more something between free verse and prose. Almost disjointed in some places. However, you DO have an exceptional way of getting your themes across, so I must applaud you for that.

*doffs hat*

*swings cane, walking off*

08-23-2003, 12:45 AM	#2 (permalink)
Jaron Crazy Location: Hong Kong.	Thanks for sharing, Gremlin. I actually preferred the first one, because of the rythem that seems to be lacking in the second one. Your style seems to be somewhere between free verse and "normal" four-line stanzas, and it seems to work quite well for you. Your second one, however, lacks the solidarity, seeming to be more something between free verse and prose. Almost disjointed in some places. However, you DO have an exceptional way of getting your themes across, so I must applaud you for that. doffs hat swings cane, walking off