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Ack,
I appreciate your feedback and all,
but how to explain this.
what I wrote was unedited, it was one pouring out of words feeling and thought.
so yes the grammer was bad there was no breaks etc.
but it was kind of meant to be that way.
But to your defense I did title the thread a thread of poems and poems ares supposed to be structured and all.
And even though your corrections are very touching and do make the poems grammaticly more correct it doesn t feel like my poem anymore.
I look at my poems as the closest way to paint a picture of the mush that is all tangled inside of me.
and to be honest my insides can be ugly hence the ugly poem. i guess it can be kind of like an abstract painting.
The poems are unedited and missing refinement.
Anyhow I appreciate your feedback, but please going forward, can you cut and paste the poem and the corrections into another thread and use that thread as a correction thread. I will totally read your input and all, but as for the original thread I want people to see the poem in its stripped roar erratic state.
Thank you.
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~Esen
What is everyone doing in my room?
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