whoa... This is a very quality work. The mental protrait that you develop is really awesome, and frightening at the same time.
It's a lot of straight narrator talk at a strech, but in context, it might work well, and i do realize you've got a lot to say there. It might help to convey some of it through interactions between erik and the narrator, but maybe not.
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They had renamed our days
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Excellent passage there...you convey that fear/love of the other that is sneaking around in Nazi ideology. Other races are degenerate, other races will take us over with their cunning if we don't kill them...it's all double think, and you really hit that in this paragraph.
Many thanks for sharing...