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Thanks for all your feedback. I wanted to give an explanation/ask a question to those who have already read the short story... and this sort of addresses the problem you had with the Cha siu line Zinserbruns.
So, what I was going for in the short story was that each food item represented a family member, and the punishment for the character was to choose one of his family members for the mob men to rub out. Broccoli represented his son, and rice represented his brother, and the bbq pork represented his wife. That's the reason for the "poetic sing song" when I was discussing the pork. I also didn't want to make any direct references to the wife in the description of the pork. Yes, I agree the style is a bit out of place, and I'll work to change that... but my question is, did anyone get that? No seriously, did anyone get that reference?
Thanks again for your feedback... I plan to post more stuff in the near future
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