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I agree with what everyone is saying, and let me make a pitch for the active voice. It's much more dynamic, too the point, and easy to parse grammatically.
You write:
I am writing you today to express my interest in the Administrative Assistant II position (#xxxxxxx) on the HR website. I am actively seeking an office assistant opportunity in a demanding, non-profit multi-tasking office. My experience in retail and working at 's have equipped me with a multitude of skills, and I would be most pleased to continue my growth at the .
I write:
Please accept my resume for the Administrative Assistant II position advertised on your website. I seek an office position in a demanding, yadayada. I offer you valuable skills in X and Y. From you, I hope for the ability to hone those skills in a challenging and dynamic environment yadayadayada.
Like that.
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