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I liked Oscar Night and Eternal Optimist. They were clever and amusing in a lovely cynical way. I also liked A Bit of a Wild One, but it went on a bit too long and became predictable, unlike the poem's subject. Perhaps you could take out this stanza:
"woke up to screeching
looked out the window
lawn littered with stolen cars
you're on top of one
crowing away"
The other poems, however, didn't really draw me in. The first few lines of the other poems held little to make me want to keep reading, so that might be worked on.
I do like your general style of writing; it's calm and questioning and peaceful. Good job.
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