Ryborg, it's a catchy beginning, but it may be a little too gritty. You set several hooks and I took the bait. What, a mayor's daughter murdered, a wasted cop that needs an explanation, and cop makes deal with cop-killer. I surmise that Falcon is looking for an at-a-boy when he gets the mayor's daughter murderer. He might even be a shady cop. It has potential. Pursue it.
