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3 now, 3 later
Hi,
I'm thinking of submitting these pieces to my colleges lit magazine and would like any feedback I can get, thanks in advance.
phantasms
twelve years always too many to
soon curves call
lumps from
throat
hi boy, hi boy,
hi boy, hi, ..ir
hi.
heels and heads
tumbleweeds
head in a hole,
nail in a head
door and a head.
some say they would like to forget, there is much that could be forgotten. Much that ought, scratch that, keep it. value it. sham, shame on you.
pricking us
exactly so, pricking
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People
convenient to consider
capital
utopia
open to sell black
black rivers
the sun rises and shines on the wicked
and the righteous pray it will not
in eternity
and condemn, nay
Build themselves, for their nieghbours
oh won't you love him dearly
a second kingdom
phantasms laugh
the wager destroys
the bridge that was building
up
the flames consume
the ladder
and the first/last etc
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Spring colours in a winter
it goes wrong, all wrong and yet it goes.
under the floorboards it goes
underground.
there are 4 locks on the basement door
the kind you can only unlock from the top
right, so you're stuck down there
you get the picture, 4 of them,
there isn't a one on the front door.
(don't tell them I told you that)
in the living room there are two
switches they don't turn on anything
except the room.
we have deduced that various schedules
went unenforced. for some time quite likely,
to timely profit surely.
and yet it goes. cabins sechelt
temporate rainforest, salmon country
the hippies had a crack once
though it lacked the bang of retirement cabins
redocorating themselves a la cubism.
goes, oh watch it go. what are you looking at?
yours goes too, oh oh it goes.
and you know it, when it slips out, leaves you glass
seeing brown, relaxing white.
judas, the priest, not the apostle
had a few killed, a few more killed
each other. mothers and the man got in a league
that was a dangerous one, the mothers feel
the man deals.
tears poor for the lost, for the statistics
tragic of course, not the grand
those we'll keep, they win, winning is important.
remember? wasn't it something else
some other religion
decried the idol. mine is a law i follow
you should too. just don't muck it all up
you
is 3 enough, hostages, how many can you kill?
to save how many, 4? none, unthinkable!
you repeat verbatim
and walk into the rainbow
the sticky sweet
shadow on your soul sets slow
tectonic slow
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if i remember i'll post 3 others when i get home
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tim(mah)
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