mojodragon

This is the beginning of a book I've just started writing. I was hoping that I could get a little feedback before I get too far into it. I've already got an outline for the whole book, including most major plot turns. Now, all I have to do is actually start writing it. Well, here's what I've got so far:


edit: removed section to avoid confusion. The actual beginning of the book can be found starting at reply # 6