I will break from the throng.
I enjoyed the second more, as the first seemed more a trip down egos potholed lane.
The second seemed to portray more of a message, and a good one at that.
I still enjoyed the first poem , as it was somewhat insightful concerning the author, as writting when buzzed regularly does. But again, the second version is liquid heat, and I imagine (perhaps incorrectly) that is what you were shooting for.
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Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha
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