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Well, on the swearing line - the girl's saying she's better than Remmy, yada yada yada. But her actions aren't making her seem that way. She's smart about taking the beer, but her presence would have much more impact if the swearing was meaningful. Just my personal opinion, if every other word is a swear word coming out of someone's mouth, my impression of them drops. Maybe rethink to where in the scene she shows the most frustration, and let it fit there.
As far as Remmy and Streets, you DO need to explain that a little further. Seeing 25 grand would be the motivation for pretty much anybody to snag the cash, but exactly How and WHY does Remmy know/care that it's Streets? Flashbacks would work, I think- or else when he says "I'm taking your money, Streets" have something there.
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