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The strongest point of your script is definately the pacing. It moves along at just the right speed for a film of its length.
The dialogue is sharp and compliments the characters well. You can see Guy Ritchie in it. The liberal swearing definately gives it a Guy Ritchie feel, but some of it seems out of context and completely unneccessary.
In terms of your characters, they fit into the story but just seem a little underdeveloped. This isn't too surprising considering it's a short film with little time to spend on each character. Maybe it might work in your favour to write a couple of them out of it. It seems to me some of them are expendable. Also, there's no closure to their stories. All we know is Remmy wins the big pot and loses his bad luck streak, and that Streets gets shot. It seems there's all this excellent buildup and then nothing happens except some guy gets shot for no good reason, and another guy walks away with a fortune he won from someone else's money. Maybe Remmy could be discovered as the guy that took the money from the mugging scene, and be the one to get shot? It offers some closure and keeps with Remmy's luckless character.
It's a very good script, and I hope I've helped to improve upon it, if only slightly.
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