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Is this a full sentance outline? If it is it's good, if not then you might not want to use such complete ideas.
Also, I've found that this depends on the teacher but I think in an outline how it is supposed to be is if you have an "A" you have to have a "B", and if you have a "1" you have to have a "2". and so forth. I think there's a couple places where you could add another point in there.
Also, your general purpose is "To Inform" yet you're using the Monroes Motivated Sequence which is used for a persuasive speech. That's at least what I was taught in my speech class this past summer. If your speech is indeed to inform, then I would change the attention, need, visualization, and actualization steps to something else and then make sure that you are only conveying the idea of information to your audience. If you're purspose is to persuade, then make the appropriate changes in your general purpose and make sure that you are trying to convince the audience of something, for example why they should visit Vancouver Canada.
Hope that helps.
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