It's an easy read...and the images you paint jump out very nicely...it is a bit self indulgent in places though...some of my favorite authors are guilty of that.
I can hear the narration in my head and there are a few places where it turns from telling me the story to lecturing me on the reality of being.
The paragraph about individual people not being special sounded more like a lecture than a passage. Is there a better way to say this? Most people know this stuff already. Maybe just a passing line about instead of a full paragraph.
Overall I would love to read more...I like the darkness it conveys while not being too dark...and I gotta know - who'd he shoot?
