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By grammar, I meant a few words had been misspelled, I just wasn't sure if this was intentional or not. As far as the line, your change is a definitely a lot more in the same vein as the theme of the previous stanzas and lines. If you don't want to use the word beyond twice, that might be the place to interject one of them with a different adjective to make it a little less generic.
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Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna
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