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Grammer has never been a strong suit, but a lot of it was on purpous. I've been a jazz pianist for about ten years now, and I've taught myself that ignoring the rules can sometimes make a song much more interesting. Of course, I have no idea how to punctuate when I'm working outside the lines of grammer. I don't even know if it's acceptable to use impropor grammer as a tool. But, I agree with you about that line. It had been bothering me. How about "A community beyond infinity; beyond the purest joy of this world."? It sounds a little generic, but it fits.
Kinda has a nice ring to it.
Oh, and than you very much for the feedback.
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