There's a really good flow, aside from a few grammatical errors. It could just be me, but this line:
This community will go on forever and never be tainted or choked by anyone or anything
just felt a little out of place somehow. Maybe something to try would be "Forever this community lives, untainted, unchoked by life in all its forms" or something. Maybe play with the wording, trying to express yourself without all the ands and ors that are kind of taking up mental space in that line. Feel free to totally ignore anything I just said, but you said to be honest
