I do like the flow of it with just "until." That is sooem sound advice. I also used am'rous instead of amorous, again to get the syllables to match up. Maybe I will look in to changing that one, too.
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The inspiration came during English 102. I found myself attracted to the woman I was sitting next to. Then I started thinking about how that happens in pretty much every class, every semester, so I wrote a poem about it.
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"If I cannot smoke cigars in heaven, I shall not go!"
- Mark Twain
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