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er, nice arabic flavour to the story... but you kinda cut it a bit short, and you didnt really explain half of the background. for instance why did the man who attacked boukra give him psychic powers?
wrt grammer, two things. The story didnt really flow very well. Also, you should. stop. using. very. small. sentences. as. it. is. very. annoying. =)
but apart from that, good read, and i look forward to reading more from you.
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