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I won't give any specific advice, since this looks a lot like a homework assignment, and I know I wouldn't want my students getting this sort of help off of the internet, but some general tips.

1. Watch adjective/noun and subject/verb agreement. S/V is generally okay, but you make a few mistakes.

2. Some of your sentences are missing Indirect Objects.

3. Masculine and neuter nouns in the genitive need an -s or -es added on to the end.

4. The following words are wrong: toeten (as in "Als sie jung war, toetete sie..."), Schlussfolgerung, and Rolle Modelle. Leo.de is your friend.

5. And it's "Hilf mir", not helfe mir. You make a few similar mistakes with strong verbs throughout.

Hope this helps.

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"Die Deutschen meinen, daß die Kraft sich in Härte und Grausamkeit offenbaren müsse, sie unterwerfen sich dann gerne und mit Bewunderung:[...]. Daß es Kraft giebt in der Milde und Stille, das glauben sie nicht leicht."

"The Germans believe that power must reveal itself in hardness and cruelty and then submit themselves gladly and with admiration[...]. They do not believe readily that there is power in meekness and calm."

-- Friedrich Nietzsche