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Originally posted by agball
I would edit your cover letter, there is to much of the "I am" syndrome. Maybe change it to say - some of my accomplishments have been, etc.
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ok, I changed:
I am currently a full-time student at [well known technical university in the area] majoring in information systems and working to obtain a minor in biology and business. I am looking for a computer support field technician type position that will allow me to better expand my skills and experience.
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As a freshman full-time student at [some university], majoring in information systems and obtaining a minor in biology and business, I am looking for a computer support field technician type position that will allow me to better expand my skills and experience.
Will that work? It almost seems like a run on sentence
-Robert