Thaw
 

Thaw

Raise the whip
as i wish to feel
something
beyond this enduring numbness

The sting it brings
and the heat that follows
are all that can melt
these layers of frost

At last in pain
i can feel
alive
not dead with heartache

So raise it higher
and let it crack
through the cold
burning out my sorrow.

Deliciously provacative.
A good visionary.
Nice work.

This is the work where your true voice seems to really come through. The desperation for emotion that always lies under the deadening effect of depression.
"So raise it higher / and let it crack" - excellent

*soft smile*... thank you... i appreciate your comments... good or bad... it's the best way to learn and evolve...

Good imagery, it had my cringing.

I also like the emotions it evokes.

Thanks :)