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marsfyre · 05-25-2003, 09:27 PM

Just Say Those Words

Just say those words, my heart beats faster
Close up my darkness, lonelyness
For a moment the world is complete
All is perfect all is light, except...

Dancing in my mind, reality
Recognition of truth shines through
Shattered light, illusion broken
I realize the failing truth of words

Just say those words, you love me, you lie
Opened my darkness, sealed 'way
The light! gone from my heart, torn away!
Spilled it out across the floor

The sorrow in my heart, pain of mind
Ravaged and Wretched emotion
Blackened Soul, Cold like ice, no more pain
no pain but what cost to my soul?

Eowyn_Vala · 05-26-2003, 11:39 AM

It is very deep and personal. Parts of it I can relate to. It seems so cold and lonely yet at the same time so full of pain. This is really good!

Esen · 11-23-2003, 07:50 AM

thanks for showing a part of your self

Amarth · 11-23-2003, 02:01 PM

That's deep. I can relate to most of this I think. I love this stuff.

Minx · 11-24-2003, 09:00 AM

Very nice. I relate strongly to this one.
Please keep sharing with us!

J.R.V.A. · 11-24-2003, 09:37 PM

I agree with these guys, please post more

marsfyre · 11-24-2003, 11:39 PM

I wrote this and maybe half of another poem, so don't expect more anytime soon lol

riptide4070 · 12-05-2003, 06:09 PM

I have a wonderful girlfriend I've been dating for two months. I don't think it would be fair to tell her of the pain I keep inside. I feel numb inside just like the emotions your poem portrayed. I understand. Thanks for sharing

05-25-2003, 09:27 PM	#1 (permalink)
marsfyre Psycho Location: somewhere	Just Say Those Words (short poem) Just Say Those Words Just say those words, my heart beats faster Close up my darkness, lonelyness For a moment the world is complete All is perfect all is light, except... Dancing in my mind, reality Recognition of truth shines through Shattered light, illusion broken I realize the failing truth of words Just say those words, you love me, you lie Opened my darkness, sealed 'way The light! gone from my heart, torn away! Spilled it out across the floor The sorrow in my heart, pain of mind Ravaged and Wretched emotion Blackened Soul, Cold like ice, no more pain no pain but what cost to my soul?

05-26-2003, 11:39 AM	#2 (permalink)
Eowyn_Vala Insane Location: There's no place like home..	It is very deep and personal. Parts of it I can relate to. It seems so cold and lonely yet at the same time so full of pain. This is really good! __________________ Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before. DG: And, how am I doing? Cain: Well, there's less hugging when I do it

11-23-2003, 07:50 AM	#3 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	thanks for showing a part of your self __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

11-24-2003, 09:00 AM	#5 (permalink)
Minx Junkie Location: Up yonder	Very nice. I relate strongly to this one. Please keep sharing with us! __________________ You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!

11-24-2003, 09:37 PM	#6 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	I agree with these guys, please post more __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

11-23-2003, 02:01 PM	#4 (permalink)
Amarth Loser Location: About 50,000 feet in the air... oh shit.	That's deep. I can relate to most of this I think. I love this stuff.

11-24-2003, 11:39 PM	#7 (permalink)
marsfyre Psycho Location: somewhere	I wrote this and maybe half of another poem, so don't expect more anytime soon lol

12-05-2003, 06:09 PM	#8 (permalink)
riptide4070 Addict Location: Boone, NC	I have a wonderful girlfriend I've been dating for two months. I don't think it would be fair to tell her of the pain I keep inside. I feel numb inside just like the emotions your poem portrayed. I understand. Thanks for sharing __________________ "the greatest trick the devil ever pulled, was making the world believe he didn't exist" -Kevin Spacey 'The Usual Suspects'