Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community  

Go Back   Tilted Forum Project Discussion Community > Creativity > Tilted Literature


 
 
LinkBack Thread Tools
Old 12-04-2004, 11:26 AM   #1 (permalink)
Upright
 
Location: Burton-on-Trent, England
The Statue - yet another short story

I'd appreciate your comments please: bad or good, short or long. Cheers


The Statue

It’s very dark here in the garage but at least we are together. We used to stand outside in a lovely garden. People used to admire us and take our photograph. When I say we I am referring to my base and I. My owner never knew what really happened to us.

It’s a sad and sorry tale. In fact I can’t bear to think about it. Her neighbours told our owner that we were blown over in the wind. “How could that be possible?” She couldn’t even lift us. Actually we were one then so I should say me. Her brother came over and carried me from the boot of the car along the straight, level path to the shared back garden. It is the largest open space I have ever seen in my life. Ben patiently moved me about from one position to another: lovely man. Eventually I was in a position where I could gaze out into the field next door. I loved it there. Even in the cold winter. I know you are thinking frost damage may have weakened me but that isn’t the case. I loved the wind: it caressed me; blew the dust off me and kept me dry.

Occasionally I hear my owner come in. She tuts and I know she is wondering how to repair me. Personally, I think she has taken on too much. We, my base and I, were moved into this garage about a year ago. She has never cleaned the garage. It is filthy. Maybe she is waiting for warmer weather. There is often a lot of activity: sawing, mowing, painting and banging. One day lots of huge items arrived. They were in many different shapes and sizes. I have no idea what they were. She found time for them, but not for us.

In happier times she gave me a name: Ariadne. I do look quite Grecian so it is appropriate.

We share the garage with what I can only describe as junk. Everything, except me, is covered with cobwebs. Even my base is covered with cobwebs. It’s funny you know, the other day our owner came over to me and blew all the cobwebs off me. I even think she came in specially to do it: just to see me. Perhaps she does care. Being blown over like that reminded me of the wind in the garden in late summer. The mower, now he isn’t junk, in fact he’s very handsome in a worn out kind of way, (I’d forgotten about him earlier when I was thinking of the cobwebs), anyway, the mower tells me the garden here is quite different to the other garden. He only saw the other garden briefly, because someone else mowed the lawn, but he adored it as much as I did. Anyway, I digress yet again. The garden here is very sheltered. There is much less wind but there are lovely trees and the garden is very private. He has four lawns to mow. They are as neglected as the garage is dirty, he tells me. There is moss all over the place and buttercups, dandelions and plantains. He even saw a violet in the middle of the lawn yesterday. Our owner saw it too. Mower watched her gently dig it out and put it in the nearest flower border. Then she went off to the outside tap, filled the watering can and gave the little plant enough water to help it on it’s way.

See! She has time for that! But not for me! I mean us.

Today has been a very sad day for Mower. A large, empty box has appeared near the door. It contained a Flymo Micro Lite. At first I told mower that despite the appearance of the photograph on the box a microlite is a little plane that flies in the air and carries only one or perhaps two people. He wouldn’t believe me. He is nowhere near as worldly wise as I. We were both quite stunned when the old, rejected and previously Wall-mounted Gas Fire pointed out the smaller writing beneath the name. It read “Lightweight Electric Hover Mower”.

Previously Wall-mounted Gas Fire said Mower would probably be sold off in the Bargain Basement column in the local newspaper. He would go to a much poorer home where the owner wouldn’t clean the grass off him and would never, ever sharpen his blades. He is a bitter and twisted old creature. And he’s ugly, old-fashioned and bulky. It’s no wonder nobody bought him.

We are all very dejected now. We await our respective fates. None of us has a kind word to say or a pleasant thought to think.

Personally I think I will be here forever. Perhaps it could be worse, but I don’t know how.

Ariadne’s head and shoulders.
heather99 is offline  
Old 12-04-2004, 10:48 PM   #2 (permalink)
Drifting
 
amonkie's Avatar
 
Administrator
Location: Windy City
That's a perspective I haven't read from in a while - I really like your use of we/me/i/us - it really drew me into the story having to pay attention to that. Thanks for sharing!
__________________
Calling from deep in the heart, from where the eyes can't see and the ears can't hear, from where the mountain trails end and only love can go... ~~~ Three Rivers Hare Krishna
amonkie is offline  
 

Tags
short, statue, story


Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Trackbacks are On
Pingbacks are On
Refbacks are On



All times are GMT -8. The time now is 01:21 AM.

Tilted Forum Project

Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.7
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
Search Engine Optimization by vBSEO 3.6.0 PL2
© 2002-2012 Tilted Forum Project

1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 36 37 38 39 40 41 42 43 44 45 46 47 48 49 50 51 52 53 54 55 56 57 58 59 60 61 62 63 64 65 66 67 68 69 70 71 72 73 74 75 76 77 78 79 80 81 82 83 84 85 86 87 88 89 90 91 92 93 94 95 96 97 98 99 100 101 102 103 104 105 106 107 108 109 110 111 112 113 114 115 116 117 118 119 120 121 122 123 124 125 126 127 128 129 130 131 132 133 134 135 136 137 138 139 140 141 142 143 144 145 146 147 148 149 150 151 152 153 154 155 156 157 158 159 160 161 162 163 164 165 166 167 168 169 170 171 172 173 174 175 176 177 178 179 180 181 182 183 184 185 186 187 188 189 190 191 192 193 194 195 196 197 198 199 200 201 202 203 204 205 206 207 208 209 210 211 212 213 214 215 216 217 218 219 220 221 222 223 224 225 226 227 228 229 230 231 232 233 234 235 236 237 238 239 240 241 242 243 244 245 246 247 248 249 250 251 252 253 254 255 256 257 258 259 260 261 262 263 264 265 266 267 268 269 270 271 272 273 274 275 276 277 278 279 280 281 282 283 284 285 286 287 288 289 290 291 292 293 294 295 296 297 298 299 300 301 302 303 304 305 306 307 308 309 310 311 312 313 314 315 316 317 318 319 320 321 322 323 324 325 326 327 328 329 330 331 332 333 334 335 336 337 338 339 340 341 342 343 344 345 346 347 348 349 350 351 352 353 354 355 356 357 358 359 360