Back from a seven-month break..
 

I stopped writing for about seven months for various reasons, and this is my first attempt since "being back." Keep in mind that this was written moments ago and so is a rough first-draft. I'm not sure if I'm going to bring it in line syllable/rhyming-wise or if I should leave it as-is. Anyhow:

freefall

I've been falling for so long,
I don't know which up is right.
All I see is so much wrong,
fallen too far to see the light.

Rock-bottom has come and gone,
a pleasant break from my fall.
I yearn only to witness the dawn,
and succumb to its burning thrall.

Yet no blessed rays reach here,
no salvation awaits my kin.
And so underfoot we dissapear,
to freeze to death for our sin.

Well deserved, this doom will be,
make no mistake of lenience.
Guilt is the burden we shall bear,
for the guilty's convenience.

It is our place in this hellish world,
to writhe beneath the ground.
As a speared worm upon a hook,
our purpose be not profound.

Complaints of this reality,
are plainly heard far and wide.
Yet not even the son of god,
chanced to avoid a spear in his side.

Give up, I say, and join me now,
as we freefall to our demise.
Perhaps, I hope, in the next world,
we will fall into the skies.

Very well written Sere. A lot of strong emotion and imagery. Well concieved and takes the reader from point A to B at a good pace.

If this is just a rough draft, you, sir have great talent and should be doing this for a living.