Begone
 

Why are you here...in my mind
finally gone from my heart
too much effort involved with you
too much pain brought on by myself
still...is it right to hurt the tormentor
i just want you gone...not even history
history is remembered ..i want you gone
the fog that burns off before i awaken
the tree that fell in the woods
missing from a memory ....forgotten

to cause you pain is to accept that you still matter
and you do not...
the check is in the mail

8 views....not a word....what is the point of posting here? Wake up people.

i hear ya tec, i submitted at least 10 new poems in my thread, not one word....10 lines of silence, not one word...i thought feedback was the most important thing but who knows what is?.... anyways your poem was stunning...the last line is a clencher, kinda a coup de tat or however you spell it..the icing on the cake...brilliant work and remember, although replies are nice, we don't need them, as poets we write to express how we feel, not to feel what other people express...

I liked the line "to cause you pain is to accept that you still matter" It is true.

But I am not a poet....I NEED input from you folks to figure out how to get better.

it is my firm belief tec that everyone is a poet....lines don't have to rhyme, or be in proper structure...look at some of e e cummings work...

what you put into your writing your emotion and your feelings, thats what makes you a good writer.

i think the only way you can "get better" is to keep track of what you wrote, why you wrote it, look at your older stuff, compaired to your newer, what changed...you'll see how you're most comfortable writing, and will tone it even bettter.

Tecoyah,That was written by what I consider to be the ex husband,am I right? :)

Yup....shortly after the fireworks.

I like it. It shows such deep pain and had a good flow.:thumbsup: