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She Walks In...
She walks in briskly leaving her shoes at the door
Wearing a purple country dress strictly worn for the summer Her long hair covers her face and eyes because she walked in the rain again No smile upon her face just that petrifying stare No words need to be said because our hearts and minds feel as one She walks to the bathroom for a shower Taking off her jewelry, setting down her purse, and stripping off the dress That clings to her strong body like fire clings to its fuel She only gives me one look with a smile before she enters the shower I stand there with a blank look I thought she was gone from my life But she never leaves Always coming back seeking solace and warmth You’d think a woman like her wouldn’t care for such things She has the stare of a viper, right before it strikes She looks at me as if I were prey But soon found out I’m equally matched in speed and diligence A snake will tend to veer awat from the trail of a mongoose But she is of a different breed As I hear the water flowing as it falls from her flesh down to the tile I decide that this time I will pick my book back up So often have I joined her in the shower But I don’t like being the predictable one Soon I’m in a trance, reading about a whole other world And barely notice when the water stops She makes the slightest bit of noise while grooming her body As she puts her things back on And heads for the door Not a word was shared but pages of thoughts were ushered We both know what we do to each other And yet these games always go unfinished….. |
I love this line :
That clings to her strong body like fire clings to its fuel That is a great description. I really like this poem, it tells a whole story and develops both characters. |
Great visual work Rip. It is refreshing to read you again.
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i hate playing games with people like that, and i know how it feels. very thought provoking and wonderful descriptions. i could easily picture it in my mind. i hope to read more of your work.
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very cool
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Great work! I love how you can see the images described so clearly.
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Very good, thanks
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killer passage, It reminds me of my one exeperiences, maybe we're not so different after all.
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thank you for all of the wonderful replies. If I write any more pieces like this one, I won't hesitate to post it!
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