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Old 12-31-2004, 11:21 AM   #1 (permalink)
follower of the child's crusade?
 
today my only love song

My Beautiful Day

This ugly alarm clock scares me awake
While it's still dark, dreams that linger
Slowly retreat, close my eyes again, take
A long sad breath, and roll out of bed...

26 today
yesterday
tomorrow
probably

I limp over the broken coat hangers
Pull on some Hebrew language shirt
I hated my father so much, many years
But the irony I dress in doesnt hurt

dreaming
of car
chases and
dead girls

Beautiful day, beautiful day, we spent it
Together, or some of it at least, you looked
Put out when I shrugged my shoulders, is it
My fault that you dont like any of the music

on the radio
love song
John Peel
grave song

Flowers for the dead, for the living, Mcdonald's
Breakfast. Jesus, mayo on my tie, silly smile
Silly laugh, your hand my thigh, a moment
Catch it, talk about something else for a while

It passes
Self despriciating
Nod, silly
laugh, silly
kiss, dead
relatives and dry eyes

Pick me up about four, ok, ok. see you later
See you later. Wave a little, then shrug
Turn away and slump inside the world doesnt stop
Compare my left side to your right side, guess it measures up.

Pony tail
Tiger teeth
I'm not
A qualified accountant

Heavy drink, hurts my arm, kiss me right here
In the joint between my forearm and my elbow
Music too loud, make smy heart hollow, the fear
Creeps in and out, I dont like it so much here

The two of us, this strange symetry
your girl girl laugh, some epiphany
Jesus man, stare at my hands, the palms
Are full of lines, some ****ing epiphany.
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Old 12-31-2004, 04:50 PM   #2 (permalink)
Fade out
 
Location: in love
[QUOTE=Strange Famous]My Beautiful Day

What kind kind of mood were you in when you wrote this??


Very interesting strangefamous . . . thanks for posting it. Your imagery is haunting and beautiful, i appreciate that sort of thing . . .

happy new year!
sweetpea

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Old 01-01-2005, 05:38 PM   #3 (permalink)
It's All About The Ass!!
 
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Location: In a pool of mayonnaise!!
Quote:
Originally Posted by Strange Famous
Turn away and slump inside the world doesnt stop
Compare my left side to your right side, guess it measures up.
Yes I love that line. Agreed on the good imagery as well. I can also relate to other lines as well. I enjoyed this. Happy new year to the both of you...Hopefully it brings you good things.

Asta!!
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Old 01-02-2005, 05:37 AM   #4 (permalink)
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[QUOTE=sweetpea]
Quote:
Originally Posted by Strange Famous
My Beautiful Day

What kind kind of mood were you in when you wrote this??


Very interesting strangefamous . . . thanks for posting it. Your imagery is haunting and beautiful, i appreciate that sort of thing . . .

happy new year!
sweetpea
introspective and lonely I guess. Thinking about the past and stuff.
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hidden will not become manifest, and nothing covered will remain
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Old 01-02-2005, 12:31 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Location: in love
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introspective and lonely I guess. Thinking about the past and stuff.
Introspective . . . yes, that comes across. You are really intelligent, your writing is great.
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Old 01-14-2005, 09:13 AM   #6 (permalink)
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I loved it. The sentences seem fractured and broken and the loneliness underneath shows through the cracks.
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