The Lie
 

Im the lie, living for you
So you dont have to cry
Im the hidden burden
Upon your wicked soul
Ive bleed for you
Ive died for you
Im falling forever
Cursed by you

Ill save myself this time
Maybe Ill wake up before Im gone
Im trying to convince myself you're not real
But the whispers in my head tell me the truth
Forgotten shadows of a past life
Leaving me to your decided fate
Im the lie, living for you
So you dont have to cry

Sadness!..:(...I'm sorry that you're feeling that way. You're way too good of a person. You deserve happiness, not sorrow!

Re: The Lie
 

I really liked those lines.

Great work as usual. Much sadness there behind those words.

you know what the fun part is , i dont even have to think when i write these. . .

I have forsaken all who loved me
I have fallen from heavens door
I am dancing with the devel
In his all so human form
I am here within the midnights light
Forcefully bowed before you . . .

I highly encourage merging your many threads into one like NiceGuy. would be easier to read all of your lit that way.

what am i not allowed to post single threads??
i would probably lose my big thread cuz no one really responds to them so they just disappear like all my other work. . .

they put a notice encouraging single, consise threads of lit, not just single threads for one peom. if you had a big thread it woudl be more updated and compiled and potentially people would respond

Just try it and see.

edit - read redravins Notice. its in there.

k

I see nothing wrong with the single thread......she is right...sometimes work does "get lost" in a big thread.

ook hold up whos side ya on ?? my thing is not as many people respond to a massive thread cuz theres so much material but a single thread lets them express different oppinions for each and half the time its weeks before i post something new
i will merge them when i have time but im really busy and my life comes before organizing my poetry, sorry

its fine, just taking what ive seen from niceguy's thread.

just an idea.

hmmm that first poem sounds way too much like some of the songs from Evanescence, but still good

the second piece was short but i liked it, more so than the first

uhh ya done told you before that thats what started the whole poem. . .

i had thought that you said that sometimes the lyrics inspire you to write poetry and you'll start poetry out from a lyric of a song, which is different from mixing a few songs together and changing some of the wording or phrases to songs. I didn't say it wasn't bad or anything. I like it, it just sounds more like Evanescence than you. The second piece to me seems much more original. Hence why I like it more than the first.

great stuff, I really like it. Its powerfull stuff

:O