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JohnS72 · 12-19-2003, 10:35 AM

Another freezing night in the artic winter
He shivers from fatigue and hunger
No more, he says to her.

She burns.

Burns until she's a lump of charred flesh and blood
The screams since have long faded,
muted by the distant mountains
The fire feels warm. He laughs to himself.
at last, dinner will be served.

taliendo · 12-20-2003, 12:30 AM

that,

well, that was quite morbid. I like.

vonstalhein · 12-20-2003, 06:36 AM

hahaha, nice, short, and damnably evil. I'd like to hear the same circumstances from the burning womans point of view.

J.R.V.A. · 12-20-2003, 08:47 AM

Yea, I like too. Drew me in and I had to read it again. Good stuff, please post more

JohnS72 · 12-21-2003, 09:37 PM

I was going through my room today and I found a note I had written. I never bothered to give it to her, and later on, I'll post more details about the circumstances pending this note. Here it is.
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Dear You,
It feels like just yesterday, you and I would trade swift glances down the hall without a word being said and that was normal. It never even occured to me then that someday you would fill my mind with endless thoughts of what the future may hold for you and me. And I never thought that you would keep me awake through the night or that the things you say would taint my conscience. And yet, here we are, two people who became entwined due to destiny or fate, I don't really know what it is. And sometimes, I wonder if you feel the same way that I do, and yet I know that you are happy with the way things turned out for you, and maybe that's what tears me apart, to see that you are happy without me. I guess maybe a big part of me is just immature, cause deep down, when I disregard the circumstances and look at it, if I really did love you, I'd be happy for you, happy that you finally found someone you love, and yet, as happy as I am for you, I am so very bitter and alone that I can not bear to look you in the eye and be there for you, and for this I am sorry. Maybe all I need is some time, but the truth is, even as I write this, I'm afraid I've been tainted by bitterness and anger. But I just want you to know that I still love you, I just don't know how to express my love for you. I hope that some day, I'll gather enough strength to tell you how I really feel in person, but for now, I'm afraid all I can do is express my thoughts on paper, I know you'll understand.

I miss you.

12-19-2003, 10:35 AM	#1 (permalink)
JohnS72 Crazy	A journey into my mind Another freezing night in the artic winter He shivers from fatigue and hunger No more, he says to her. She burns. Burns until she's a lump of charred flesh and blood The screams since have long faded, muted by the distant mountains The fire feels warm. He laughs to himself. at last, dinner will be served. Last edited by JohnS72; 12-21-2003 at 09:12 PM..

12-20-2003, 12:30 AM	#2 (permalink)
taliendo Insane Location: an indelible crawl through the gutters	that, well, that was quite morbid. I like. __________________ -LIFE IS ABSURD-

12-20-2003, 06:36 AM	#3 (permalink)
vonstalhein Insane Location: Where You Live.	hahaha, nice, short, and damnably evil. I'd like to hear the same circumstances from the burning womans point of view. __________________ No Win No Fee

12-20-2003, 08:47 AM	#4 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Yea, I like too. Drew me in and I had to read it again. Good stuff, please post more __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

12-21-2003, 09:37 PM	#5 (permalink)
JohnS72 Crazy	I was going through my room today and I found a note I had written. I never bothered to give it to her, and later on, I'll post more details about the circumstances pending this note. Here it is. ------------------------------------------- Dear You, It feels like just yesterday, you and I would trade swift glances down the hall without a word being said and that was normal. It never even occured to me then that someday you would fill my mind with endless thoughts of what the future may hold for you and me. And I never thought that you would keep me awake through the night or that the things you say would taint my conscience. And yet, here we are, two people who became entwined due to destiny or fate, I don't really know what it is. And sometimes, I wonder if you feel the same way that I do, and yet I know that you are happy with the way things turned out for you, and maybe that's what tears me apart, to see that you are happy without me. I guess maybe a big part of me is just immature, cause deep down, when I disregard the circumstances and look at it, if I really did love you, I'd be happy for you, happy that you finally found someone you love, and yet, as happy as I am for you, I am so very bitter and alone that I can not bear to look you in the eye and be there for you, and for this I am sorry. Maybe all I need is some time, but the truth is, even as I write this, I'm afraid I've been tainted by bitterness and anger. But I just want you to know that I still love you, I just don't know how to express my love for you. I hope that some day, I'll gather enough strength to tell you how I really feel in person, but for now, I'm afraid all I can do is express my thoughts on paper, I know you'll understand. I miss you.