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losthellhound · 11-06-2003, 02:51 AM

- Needed : Several brave souls -

Darkened Skies has reached a milestone.. 5000 words (well actually its 5019)..

What I need are several people to read through what I have, and make suggestions.

- Are the characters realistic
- Is the description good
- Is the feel... cliched? or creative?
- Is the basic idea of the story and the setting understandable?
- If you picked up this in a book store and read what is here, would you want to read it enough to buy a copy?

I dont have a website currently to put the file, and I didnt want to put 5000 words here on tfproject (if no one wants to read it, why take up the bandwidth and HD space) I can email it, or if there are enough people, and I wont get lynched for it, I'll post it here..

" fill my lungs with fear, then exhale.. It's my turn to fly"

emmdubbs · 11-06-2003, 03:41 AM

email it to me...i'll read it, and make a page for it (i have the space and bandwidth) enigma@marksmail.com

losthellhound · 11-06-2003, 03:43 AM

Thanks. Its on its way

vonstalhein · 11-06-2003, 11:53 AM

Yeah, and me. I'd like you to e-mail to me please. Vonstalhein@hotmail.com

emmdubbs · 11-06-2003, 12:11 PM

actually so i don't delete it from my mailbox.. send it to enigma-web@marksmail.com

SSJwrestler · 11-06-2003, 08:32 PM

ill read it

SSJwrestler · 11-06-2003, 08:32 PM

i really enjoy your work so far

losthellhound · 11-06-2003, 08:34 PM

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Originally posted by SSJwrestler
i really enjoy your work so far

Thank you, I enjoy the support you guys and girls have given me

numist · 11-06-2003, 08:35 PM

losthellhound - if you want a place to host it, I can give you a few megs of server space, just PM me and I'll set you up.

SSJwrestler · 11-07-2003, 05:29 AM

im readin it, not ocmpletely done yet, but so far....SICK! in the good way

losthellhound · 11-07-2003, 07:15 AM

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Originally posted by SSJwrestler
im readin it, not ocmpletely done yet, but so far....SICK! in the good way

I want to hear all your thoughts.. May as well, what you say will prompt others in to wanting to read it

seretogis · 11-08-2003, 08:26 PM

I sent you a PM about this.

losthellhound · 11-09-2003, 02:42 AM

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Originally posted by seretogis
I sent you a PM about this.

I saw, thank you.. Just have to get back to the office for the file

Minx · 11-09-2003, 03:44 AM

I would be interested in reading more of your story.
Please pm me and I will pass along my private email, if you wish.

losthellhound · 11-10-2003, 08:29 AM

Note to anyone who has received the file.. can you forward it back to my email address (either loki@golden.net or the original email I emailed it to?) Im not going into the office today and I dont have the file here at home

losthellhound · 11-11-2003, 08:55 AM

I was wondering if anyone has finished adn has something to say.. comments are very good, I like comments, I like suggestions, I even like criticism if its not about my choice of font

Minx · 11-12-2003, 11:58 PM

I have read it through once so far and I am really enjoying it so far. It has a little air of mystery that makes me want more and I do like the way you describe your characters. I want to read it again before I offer up any real comments, though.
So far....good work losthellhound.

losthellhound · 11-13-2003, 06:11 AM

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Originally posted by Minx
I have read it through once so far and I am really enjoying it so far. It has a little air of mystery that makes me want more and I do like the way you describe your characters. I want to read it again before I offer up any real comments, though.
So far....good work losthellhound.

Thank you. I look forward to more feedback as well. I haven't had much of a chance to write alot more (just switched from night shift to morning shift and its been killing my energy level)

Thanks again

vonstalhein · 11-14-2003, 07:20 AM

you haven't emailed me it! If you have, i apologise, i haven't got it!

numist · 11-14-2003, 04:06 PM

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Im not going into the office today and I dont have the file here at home

so you work on it at work? what are you paid for?

still willing to host, btw, since you cant ftp, send it to scperry(at)ucsd.edu, and I will host.

SSJwrestler · 11-16-2003, 12:48 AM

must say man, just finished and its great...loved the detail, loved the diction, great story line...keep it up

losthellhound · 11-16-2003, 02:26 PM

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Originally posted by SSJwrestler
must say man, just finished and its great...loved the detail, loved the diction, great story line...keep it up

Thank you.. I've got moreplanned, just have to force myself back to the keyboard

11-06-2003, 02:51 AM	#1 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	Needed - Several brave souls - Needed : Several brave souls - Darkened Skies has reached a milestone.. 5000 words (well actually its 5019).. What I need are several people to read through what I have, and make suggestions. - Are the characters realistic - Is the description good - Is the feel... cliched? or creative? - Is the basic idea of the story and the setting understandable? - If you picked up this in a book store and read what is here, would you want to read it enough to buy a copy? I dont have a website currently to put the file, and I didnt want to put 5000 words here on tfproject (if no one wants to read it, why take up the bandwidth and HD space) I can email it, or if there are enough people, and I wont get lynched for it, I'll post it here.. " fill my lungs with fear, then exhale.. It's my turn to fly" __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-06-2003, 03:41 AM	#2 (permalink)
emmdubbs Psycho Location: the western part of new york	email it to me...i'll read it, and make a page for it (i have the space and bandwidth) enigma@marksmail.com __________________ "You're not your job. You're not how much money you have in the bank. You're not the car you drive. You're not the contents of your wallet. You're not your fucking khakis. You're the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." - Tyler Durden

11-06-2003, 03:43 AM	#3 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	Thanks. Its on its way __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-06-2003, 11:53 AM	#4 (permalink)
vonstalhein Insane Location: Where You Live.	Yeah, and me. I'd like you to e-mail to me please. Vonstalhein@hotmail.com __________________ No Win No Fee

11-06-2003, 12:11 PM	#5 (permalink)
emmdubbs Psycho Location: the western part of new york	actually so i don't delete it from my mailbox.. send it to enigma-web@marksmail.com __________________ "You're not your job. You're not how much money you have in the bank. You're not the car you drive. You're not the contents of your wallet. You're not your fucking khakis. You're the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." - Tyler Durden

11-06-2003, 08:32 PM	#6 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	ill read it

11-06-2003, 08:32 PM	#7 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	i really enjoy your work so far

11-06-2003, 08:35 PM	#9 (permalink)
numist Banned Location: UCSD, 510.49 miles from my love	losthellhound - if you want a place to host it, I can give you a few megs of server space, just PM me and I'll set you up.

11-07-2003, 05:29 AM	#10 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	im readin it, not ocmpletely done yet, but so far....SICK! in the good way

11-08-2003, 08:26 PM	#12 (permalink)
seretogis Huggles, sir? Location: Seattle	I sent you a PM about this. __________________ seretogis - sieg heil perfect little dream the kind that hurts the most, forgot how it feels well almost no one to blame always the same, open my eyes wake up in flames

11-09-2003, 03:44 AM	#14 (permalink)
Minx Junkie Location: Up yonder	I would be interested in reading more of your story. Please pm me and I will pass along my private email, if you wish. __________________ You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!

11-10-2003, 08:29 AM	#15 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	Note to anyone who has received the file.. can you forward it back to my email address (either loki@golden.net or the original email I emailed it to?) Im not going into the office today and I dont have the file here at home __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-11-2003, 08:55 AM	#16 (permalink)
losthellhound Thats MR. Muffin Face now Location: Everywhere work sends me	I was wondering if anyone has finished adn has something to say.. comments are very good, I like comments, I like suggestions, I even like criticism if its not about my choice of font __________________ "Life is possible only with illusions. And so, the question for the science of mental health must become an absolutely new and revolutionary one, yet one that reflects the essence of the human condition: On what level of illusion does one live?" -- Ernest Becker, The Denial of Death

11-12-2003, 11:58 PM	#17 (permalink)
Minx Junkie Location: Up yonder	I have read it through once so far and I am really enjoying it so far. It has a little air of mystery that makes me want more and I do like the way you describe your characters. I want to read it again before I offer up any real comments, though. So far....good work losthellhound. __________________ You've been a naughty boy....go to my room!

11-14-2003, 07:20 AM	#19 (permalink)
vonstalhein Insane Location: Where You Live.	you haven't emailed me it! If you have, i apologise, i haven't got it! __________________ No Win No Fee

11-16-2003, 12:48 AM	#21 (permalink)
SSJwrestler Banned Location: Davidson, NC/ Manassas, VA	must say man, just finished and its great...loved the detail, loved the diction, great story line...keep it up