Needed - Several brave souls
 

- Needed : Several brave souls -

Darkened Skies has reached a milestone.. 5000 words (well actually its 5019)..

What I need are several people to read through what I have, and make suggestions.

- Are the characters realistic
- Is the description good
- Is the feel... cliched? or creative?
- Is the basic idea of the story and the setting understandable?
- If you picked up this in a book store and read what is here, would you want to read it enough to buy a copy?

I dont have a website currently to put the file, and I didnt want to put 5000 words here on tfproject (if no one wants to read it, why take up the bandwidth and HD space) I can email it, or if there are enough people, and I wont get lynched for it, I'll post it here..


" fill my lungs with fear, then exhale.. It's my turn to fly"

email it to me...i'll read it, and make a page for it (i have the space and bandwidth) enigma@marksmail.com

Thanks. Its on its way

Yeah, and me. I'd like you to e-mail to me please. Vonstalhein@hotmail.com

actually so i don't delete it from my mailbox.. send it to enigma-web@marksmail.com

ill read it

i really enjoy your work so far

Thank you, I enjoy the support you guys and girls have given me

losthellhound - if you want a place to host it, I can give you a few megs of server space, just PM me and I'll set you up.

im readin it, not ocmpletely done yet, but so far....SICK! in the good way

I want to hear all your thoughts.. May as well, what you say will prompt others in to wanting to read it

I sent you a PM about this.

I saw, thank you.. Just have to get back to the office for the file ;)

I would be interested in reading more of your story.
Please pm me and I will pass along my private email, if you wish.

Note to anyone who has received the file.. can you forward it back to my email address (either loki@golden.net or the original email I emailed it to?) Im not going into the office today and I dont have the file here at home ;)

I was wondering if anyone has finished adn has something to say.. comments are very good, I like comments, I like suggestions, I even like criticism if its not about my choice of font ;)

I have read it through once so far and I am really enjoying it so far. It has a little air of mystery that makes me want more and I do like the way you describe your characters. I want to read it again before I offer up any real comments, though.
So far....good work losthellhound.
:)

Thank you. I look forward to more feedback as well. I haven't had much of a chance to write alot more (just switched from night shift to morning shift and its been killing my energy level)

Thanks again

you haven't emailed me it! If you have, i apologise, i haven't got it!

so you work on it at work? what are you paid for?

still willing to host, btw, since you cant ftp, send it to scperry(at)ucsd.edu, and I will host.

must say man, just finished and its great...loved the detail, loved the diction, great story line...keep it up

Thank you.. I've got moreplanned, just have to force myself back to the keyboard ;)