One Night (NiceGuy's Literature Thread)
 

With thanks to mirevolver for his contribution in the making of the following.

One Night

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Dear freinds,

I regret to inform you that my literature here has been removed for personal reasons. I wish for it to not be copied and published as someone else's work. I am thankful for all of the wonderful comments you have posted in response to my literature. I am extremely sorry about this, but I could see no other option.

Thank you for your kindness and understanding,

ForgottenKnight
Once known as NiceGuy

Living in a Moment

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The Void

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Semi-Random thoughts about One Night at a Club

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Semi-Random thoughts about a Moment.

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Thoughts from a Long Day

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A very nice and detailed look into your mind. Perhaps you should start a journal.

All I Offer

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You have some good stuff here. I really enjoyed reading these, thank you very much for sharing.

Thank you for reading my thoughts. I have now started a journal, and though it's not as elegant as my literature, please feel free read it.

Through your words, I have come to know some of you.
I hope you continue to post in here in addition to your journal.
Thanks for sharing.
~Angel~

No One Knows

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The Scare

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During an hour drive I focused my thoughts into a short story. When I got back to my place, I tried remembering that story and writting it down. The following is what came out.

Forgotten

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You have some real talent. You should consider some contests.

im sorry you feel that way. i really am

The following are some semi-random thoughts I had a few days ago and have yet to share. They're not organized as literture, just as thoughts.

Help Me Now

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The following are semi-random thoughts about my life. They are not organized to be literature. They're just my thoughts.

The Observer

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The following are more semi-random thoughts, again not organized as literature, but just as thoughts.

The Pain

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I came with the hope of perhaps showing you another way to live. i did not come into this in hopes of setting you up to be hurt. You are something to me, but your expectations are trumping what this is. im not intending to fill your mind with illusions of possiblities that are dormant. they have to be. i wont walk away from what ive built other places. you once accepted that, im wondering if you still do. Friendship first. i'd say take it or leave it, but i dont want you to leave. just understand, accept. water off a duck's back.

with rule #1 comes the fine print of no expectations. thats how you get hurt.

hmnn not sure

Thank you minyn for your words. They have clearified much. I did as you said last night and prayed, and I followed that with the reading of a small section of the Bible. Today when I awoke, all was clear in my mind. I sat down at work this morning and wrote down the philisophical idea that came to me. I'd share that now, but I don't have time to type it all up, so sharing it with the little segment of the world here at the tfp will have to wait until this evening.

I lied... sorry... I barely had time to finish typing it before having to go... so now you don't have to wait to read it!

Manifestations of Reality: a Philosophy about Pain.

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its official! i think something wonderful has been tapped in you. never knew an engineer can be such a wonderful and emotional writer. Theres a little artist in everyone?

What can I say? Art runs in my family...
I'm a classical renaissance man.

I have also posted my Manifestations of Reality: a Philosophy about Pain text in a new thread on the Tilted Philosophy board to open it up for discussion. Please feel free to participate in the discussion.
http://www.tfproject.org/tfp/showthr...threadid=30461

What can I say? Art runs in my family...
I'm a classical renaissance man.

Does it? i would have never guessed with all the engineers running around!

nerds will rule the world, but artists will make it fun with them =)

Nerds rule the world, engineers build the world, politicians take all the credit, business people sell the world, and artists make the world a fun and beautiful place.

Wow, man! I never thought that I'd find someone else who felt about someone like I did! You wrote EXACTLY how I've felt about a girl for the past four months. Especially "No One Knows".

But the one I feel this for is out of reach. She is a desire that I must put away, in accordance to my "Manifestations of Reality: a Philosophy about Pain."

As I've said, that's what I'm going through as well. That's how I feel.

Sorry about the wait. I've been really busy lately, and I'm too busy for this as well, but I just had to write and post this collection of thoughts and feelings.

Have you fallen?

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This last one sure does tug on the memory strings!
Good work! ;)

In Candlelight

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life is but a dream, the question is always when you will awaken.

"you left your mark inside my soul"

my favorite line, love is so sweet but damn if it doesn't hurt

Will I Survive?

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You will survive. you have thusfar have you not?

Agreed

I'm soo sorry everyone! I had to edit out much of my literature, and make much of my journal private, for personal reasons. Perhaps sometime in the future I can undo what I had to do today.

Free Me From Myself

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Though the world can be cruel and cause pain, the raw force of your own life unshielded if left unchecked can be even more devistating to yourself. It sounds like you have taken the first steps to controlling your own raw force.

When you have succeded in that, the world can do it's worst, and you will not be phased by it.

Seasons of Friends

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im still sorry for what i've put you through.

I'm sorry for not posting here in a while, but due to recent circumstances, I no longer feel safe pouring my heart and soul into literature here on the tfp. Until a certain situation is resolved, I may not be posting much literature, if any.

Nothing To Hold On To

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ull always survive, in one form or another

Unlocking Passion

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Now within Reach

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Without You

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It’s All Been Done

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Ah crap, there goes my lit thread.

Told Me Not To

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You, my friend, are a true poet. I am blessed to have been allowed a peak at such a fine and true heart.

Keep posting, I will surely keep reading -- and don't let anyone stop you from writing, whether or not you feel able to post it or not is another matter.

Here's another version of the last poem I posted. Amazing how the changing of a few words can change so much in a poem's meaning.

Told Me Not To (Version 2)

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I wrote this just over a week ago about my walk back to work in the rain. I didn't think it was ready to post, but every time I reread it to try to perfect it, it seemed more and more set without me changing it.

I Keep Walking

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These three haiku I wrote today for an assignment in my humanities class. I'll see how the class likes them tomorrow. First I'll share them with all of my friends here at the tfp.

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I really enjoy the fact that you use repetative lines, it brings a forceful meaning to your work. I can understand how an emotion can be so bearing on your mind/heart that it freely flows again and again -- an answer to every question that your heart could ask.

I enjoyed the haiku's as well. Although the third gave me quite a smile, I would have chosen the second as the best -- your words are well chosen and placed with precision.

No Guarantees

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*bump*

This is a cool thread, trying to keep it on the first page.

You're poems have truly touched me in a way I cannot describe. I envy your talent to make simple words so powerful.

Thank you all for your support! It means a lot to me to have touched others with my words!

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Another Haiku I wrote:

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The following poem can be interpreted many ways. The literal sense stands out, but it is written as a metaphore for something that those following my journal my understand.

The Rabbit’s Mistake

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Go pumas.

NiceGuy,
Your work is so deep and full. I find it rather amazing how sadness can produce such beauty when penned through poetry. Keep writing those feelings. Not only are you writing great poems, you are doing your soul a service and helping it heal.
~Angel~

You're responses are always so kind! Thank you, Angel.

Thinking about the kind responses I have recieved here made me go back and finish a poem I had started in late October, but never got around to finishing.

Your Every Word

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Affairs of Dragons and Wizards

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nice correlation between potential real life and a game of chess.

I have just started reading your literature. I really relate to and admire No One Knows. thanks so much for writing.

Forsaken

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Lonely Night

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Blazing Inferno

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I like your cross-over to simplistic diction here. A lot of people (myself included) all to often get caught up in their own words so much that they miss conveying the message the had originally intended. Sometimes less is more.

Shattered Shield

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Peaceful Mountains

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CUZ YOURE A DORK! kidding..... midst of conversation with you.

Oh... I see... I've gone from "goon" to "dork" now... I think our friend would respond, "what the f#&k ever..." So I think I'm going to have to quote him on that and make it my response...

There was a time in which I edited out much of my literature, and changed a few lines in other pieces. After doing this, I said the following.

Now I am ready to put them back up for you to enjoy. I have put back the pieces of literature which I had edited out, and I have changed the lines of a few pieces back to what they were origionally. Now, my literature thread is completely whole agian. Finally, you can see my literature as it reflects my life, and what I have gone through since I started writing on a regular basis and posting my work here.
Please enjoy, and comments about any and/or all of my pieces are always welcomed and appriciated!

Edit: Something was mentioned to me which made me realize that I had to edit out some of my thoughts in order to be respectful towards someone I know. Therefore the works I edited back in may be missing lines.

kudos!

A Winter Sunset

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When trying to write this haiku I took two approaches that led me to two very similar haikus about the same thing, but from two different perspectives. I couldn't decide which one was better, and liked them both, so I kept and named both of them.


Lonely Woods

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Wood’s Words

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I really like these, the second one especially. "I, a lonely wood." good stuff.

I just found out today that the humanities for engineers program I'm in is having a poetry writing contest. I can submit any type of poem, and will be submitting multiple poems if it's allowed. I'm curious as to which ones do you guys think I should submit? Any and all feedback is much appriciated. And once again, thank you all for reading my work!

Dreamy Memories

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How many poems can you submit?

They never said, and it doesn't say anything on the information page I have for it. But then, it doesn't even give a deadline for submission.

[Edit]I seem to have a little while due to them not giving out prizes until during E-days in April. But the sooner I get them submitted, the better.[/Edit]

Wow i just read forgotten and it was amazing. i love those kind of storys where the maiden gets rescued by the handsom night. but never have i heard of such treachery. if i were the maiden i would be in love with you and for saving me i would devote my life to you. i hope this woman you speak of turns back to you and realizes what a great man you are. for you have both the courage, spirit and compasionto sate a million women, and you giving your heart to one is the best present you could ever give another.

Thank you, fallen_angel, for touching me with such kind words. I have learned many times, in many ways, that the world is full of treachery. But then, things are never as they appear to be. Sometimes the princess does not always wish or need to be rescued. I wish I could save a million women in circumstances like the maiden’s. But even if I only save one, it would make me the happiest man alive.

Wow.... You say so much with so little... This is pretty damn good, Thanks

To my sweet prince in shining armor,

My birth name is Sarah ( meaning god's princess). Trust me the night we talked you saved me. and i thank you for that, i dont even think i could express how much talking with you has helped me and saved me. thankyou

If I were you I would think about submitting something with a little age on it. In Candlelight is one of my favorites that you've posted here on this board. If you choose something that's been around for a bit, you'll at least know whether or not you like the piece, and if you've needed to brush up any lines.

On the other hand, especially if you can submit multiple poems, I would consider several of the haikus. Wood's Words and Dreamy Memories are my favorites, but submit which ever you like best.

Best of luck!

Your voice is being heard. Now what are you going to say or rather, what are you going to do?

=)

Your Foxy Smile

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*psst* anyone else think NiceGuy has a thing for my smile?? *giggle* I sure hope so. . .

Love the poem, but watch out mines gonna be a lot better. . .

Go to Disney World!?!:lol: :D

thinking you need to add dedications, if anything, to make people smile.

God’s Princess

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Nothing Can Change

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yup, didnt realize how much i needed to hear that until someone said it. thanks. i really appreciate it

In regards to "Nothing Can Change," I have only heard the story through word of mouth. But from what I have heard, the one who said such bitter words had no right to make the accusations made.

Minyn, from meeting you myself, I know that the unkind words said about you are completly false.