Dorian_S

Hatefully negative comments are more than welcome. If you like them, that's good too.

Scars

Scars approach the trees in winter;
Spring awakens anguished fears;
Summer rages, anger towards
the Autumns, bringing death each year

People's season's seem much different -
Lives are scarred by what they fear
Fear your sleep, those hours uncounted -
Wake to cries to without the tears

Men

Wives to-be, and lives uncharted -
Walked across and never thought of

who are they to cling to feeling?

Me I'm Fine I Sure Look Great and
women? they don't seem to touch me

Take them in but give no shelter
They're just sluts for men to punish
Men are blood and blood runs thicker
Brothers built on cancer's laughter

Esen

I really liked this stanza,
It is timelss
Very cool!

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~Esen
What is everyone doing in my room?

tecoyah

brothers built on cancers laughter....great line....all in all very good work...sorry cant find anything to be hatefully negative about, maybe if you would just show a bit less talent.

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Holding onto anger is like grasping a hot coal with the intent of throwing it at someone else; you are the one who gets burned. - Buddha

J.R.V.A.

Scars is really good, Nice work man. Thanks

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And as she plays,
her sweet song of laughter
floats through the air
and warms my heart