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Esen · 08-18-2003, 05:31 PM

Harnessed

The flesh of strained desire sweats and expands
forever curling over the shivers of my own skin.

Ripping the lining of perfection and developing the little carresses that used to hide in the back of my mind.

now named, they control the heat that echoes fluidly haphazardly engulfing me
always breaking your trance
seamless envelopes of lies broken open and disregarding the true language of your hunger. It ravishes me
filters me
makes an ever surveying harness of exstacy that breaks down and cries within the fumes of your own wicked scent
engulfing me
tiing me

singing soft whispers or reluctance just loud enough to make all who breath tremble

Bleed my innocense, sift all the tangieble blowing gusts of rememberence from myeyes and make me see the true mount of your hair.

sickening , to make us strong a true mold of inner perfection

Hear, stop, listen.

rocking forth falling forward bundles of pores opening into buckets of heat.
The linens of the bed scratch desperatly to hold us tight fondling my desires to push myself all the way in ,

the true sin, two bodies now confused buckling within each other.
the true trap of the orgasm.
The harness sea that holds you us and me.

~Chauncey AKA ECL 8/18/03

J.R.V.A. · 08-21-2003, 07:46 PM

The flesh of strained desire sweats and expands
forever curling over the shivers of my own skin.

owwwwwwwwww that is killer. I like your writings thanks

Esen · 09-03-2003, 02:14 PM

Thanks a lot J.R.V.A

I really like your writing as well.

fallen_angel · 09-03-2003, 05:41 PM

wow. . . umm. . . I lOVED IT. . . of course though when i finished reading this i want only to jump the next guy that passes by the door. . . truely erotic. . . thank you I very much enjoyed

Memnoch · 09-04-2003, 08:43 PM

I'll be honest: it's very hard for me to like free verse this...free. I like a little structure, you know? However, certain lines caught my attention:

"Bleed my innocense" - this metaphor works so well...it makes me think of so much blood coming from stigmata marks in someone's body

"Singing soft whispers [of] reluctance just loud enough to make all who breathe tremble" - wow. Just...awe inspiring. I read it twice, the second time all in one breath, out loud...and it just sounds so surreal, so anxious, so ready to just burst out into oblivion. I love it!

08-18-2003, 05:31 PM	#1 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	Harnessed Harnessed The flesh of strained desire sweats and expands forever curling over the shivers of my own skin. Ripping the lining of perfection and developing the little carresses that used to hide in the back of my mind. now named, they control the heat that echoes fluidly haphazardly engulfing me always breaking your trance seamless envelopes of lies broken open and disregarding the true language of your hunger. It ravishes me filters me makes an ever surveying harness of exstacy that breaks down and cries within the fumes of your own wicked scent engulfing me tiing me singing soft whispers or reluctance just loud enough to make all who breath tremble Bleed my innocense, sift all the tangieble blowing gusts of rememberence from myeyes and make me see the true mount of your hair. sickening , to make us strong a true mold of inner perfection Hear, stop, listen. rocking forth falling forward bundles of pores opening into buckets of heat. The linens of the bed scratch desperatly to hold us tight fondling my desires to push myself all the way in , the true sin, two bodies now confused buckling within each other. the true trap of the orgasm. The harness sea that holds you us and me. ~Chauncey AKA ECL 8/18/03 __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

08-21-2003, 07:46 PM	#2 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	The flesh of strained desire sweats and expands forever curling over the shivers of my own skin. owwwwwwwwww that is killer. I like your writings thanks __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

09-03-2003, 02:14 PM	#3 (permalink)
Esen TFPer formaly known as Chauncey Location: North East	Thanks a lot J.R.V.A I really like your writing as well. __________________ ~Esen What is everyone doing in my room?

09-03-2003, 05:41 PM	#4 (permalink)
fallen_angel Psycho Location: Somewhere between the Havens and the Earth	wow. . . umm. . . I lOVED IT. . . of course though when i finished reading this i want only to jump the next guy that passes by the door. . . truely erotic. . . thank you I very much enjoyed __________________ from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel

09-04-2003, 08:43 PM	#5 (permalink)
Memnoch Insane Location: Land of milk and honey - Wisconsin	I'll be honest: it's very hard for me to like free verse this...free. I like a little structure, you know? However, certain lines caught my attention: "Bleed my innocense" - this metaphor works so well...it makes me think of so much blood coming from stigmata marks in someone's body "Singing soft whispers [of] reluctance just loud enough to make all who breathe tremble" - wow. Just...awe inspiring. I read it twice, the second time all in one breath, out loud...and it just sounds so surreal, so anxious, so ready to just burst out into oblivion. I love it! __________________ Doing my best not to end up like Kathleen Chang.