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phoenix1002 · 04-23-2003, 08:37 PM

darkness
it descends upon me
like a suffocating blanket
yet i do not realize it is there.

My life is cast in shades of black and gray.
occasional rays of light penetrate,
but they are choked off all too soon.

sinking down, my life is a downward spiral, yet still i do not see.

Dorian_S · 04-23-2003, 11:28 PM

Listening to a lot of NIN, are we.....?

phoenix1002 · 04-24-2003, 07:52 AM

Actually.. no I'm not.... at the time I hadn't listened to them for probably half a year or so. My friend said the same thing when he read it. I had just gotten through a minor depression, and had also just watched Requiem for a Dream. I had an assignment to write a poem about madness, and in the Chinese literature we were focusing on, depression was considered madness. So I just let the words out, and that's what appeared.

kairaan · 04-24-2003, 09:31 AM

I can imagine these words just flowing out of your head on to the paper...you're very eloquent here.

Dorian_S · 04-25-2003, 12:04 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dorian_S
Listening to a lot of NIN, are we.....?

Looking back, I don't think I meant to sound like that much of an asshole. Sorry.

The poem is actually quite good. Post some more?

MSD · 04-27-2003, 08:50 PM

I think the thing that triggers the NIN response is the words "Downward Spiral," that being an album title. Anyway, it's good work, I can feel the mood and emotion that went into it.

jdwhite2003 · 04-27-2003, 09:10 PM

LOL, the first thing I thought was NIN also. Anyway, good poem, though I would like it if it were a bit longer. Can't get too much of a good thing...

Cheers,
JD

04-23-2003, 08:37 PM	#1 (permalink)
phoenix1002 Psycho Location: lost	Down darkness it descends upon me like a suffocating blanket yet i do not realize it is there. My life is cast in shades of black and gray. occasional rays of light penetrate, but they are choked off all too soon. sinking down, my life is a downward spiral, yet still i do not see. __________________ I'd rather be climbing... I approach college much like a recovering alcoholic--one day at a time...

04-24-2003, 07:52 AM	#3 (permalink)
phoenix1002 Psycho Location: lost	Actually.. no I'm not.... at the time I hadn't listened to them for probably half a year or so. My friend said the same thing when he read it. I had just gotten through a minor depression, and had also just watched Requiem for a Dream. I had an assignment to write a poem about madness, and in the Chinese literature we were focusing on, depression was considered madness. So I just let the words out, and that's what appeared. __________________ I'd rather be climbing... I approach college much like a recovering alcoholic--one day at a time...

04-23-2003, 11:28 PM	#2 (permalink)
Dorian_S Upright	Listening to a lot of NIN, are we.....?

04-24-2003, 09:31 AM	#4 (permalink)
kairaan Banned	I can imagine these words just flowing out of your head on to the paper...you're very eloquent here.

04-27-2003, 08:50 PM	#6 (permalink)
MSD The sky calls to us ... Super Moderator Location: CT	I think the thing that triggers the NIN response is the words "Downward Spiral," that being an album title. Anyway, it's good work, I can feel the mood and emotion that went into it.

04-27-2003, 09:10 PM	#7 (permalink)
jdwhite2003 Upright	LOL, the first thing I thought was NIN also. Anyway, good poem, though I would like it if it were a bit longer. Can't get too much of a good thing... Cheers, JD