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Releasing the demons within.
A wonderful vision of truth. Thanks Nikki :D |
Beautiful and sad! So eloquently put that it makes me want to cry.
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speechless....
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The first work I've read on the Lit Board, and I'm probably quite spoiled now.
I don't know how you were feeling when you wrote this, but I certainly hope that getting it down on paper helped. Very well done. I'll read anything and everything you post up here in the future. |
At one time in my life those words I wrote were reality to me. That is where the intensity came from.
Now I am in a different palce emotionally. I still have a dark side lurking that remembers how this immense saddness felt. It only comes out sometimes now. |
Indifferent
Your parting shadow
Still falls across my floor I still hear the silence Knocking on the door Footsteps traced backwards Lead me to the beginning You can't take your knife Out of my back Blood dripping Emotions lingering The room Won't stop spinning It's wedged in there so deeply You seem to have lost track Watching the trail Of the drops coming down Maybe then you'll see What I knew all along Your eyes following me Even when your not here Your voice haunts me Every syllable Instills fear Your nails left marks All across my back Ribbons of flesh Hanging off track Little zig zags Appear in the sky You say they are clouds Every word is a lie Watching every move Before I can make it Stealing every breath Before I can take it Who are you to judge And say what is right Your perfection goes unnoticed Yet you slaughter me with words You think you are the only one Who says things Unheard Your voice is all around me I can still hear the ringing in my ears Little bits of resentment Falling down like tears I can't take back the things that I did Anymore then the future Can be changed up ahead It's best to move on So Forget I am even alive I burned those bridges Now your the one Stuck on the other side |
Serious pain Nikki.
Having been there I truely understand the feelings you have put into this. Very strong work. Thank you for putting a look at your soul on the board. It's more personal than any picture. |
For me I can write about anything using descriptions as if I was actually in the situation.
Sometimes this is not always the case. I am the one looking in the window of the soul, taking notes and watching the emotion. |
Stunning work NIKKI.
Reaching into the depths of you through your words. Thank you for sharing. I am humbled. |
Our Lives Together
There are words that just won't come
No matter how I try to speak them I can't find them inside this twisted heart Black around the edges Tender and soft An angel perhaps Killing the devil that hides The miles that separate The feelings and the soft side Images burning in my eyes Torture me Take me Places I never wanted to see To late now to realize Hours that we never spent Moments that faded so fast Time that somehow just went Sitting on the edge of life Remembering those little things That pulled you through to the next day Withering memories The branches breaking in the wind You used to climb that same tree Now you sit beneath Wondering how to get to the top again Or if you ever will Taking my hand inside of yours You pull me to my feet Looking over the days that have so quickly passed I thank someone I don't really know For leading me on this path My heart breaking over things I just can't show You pull me along side of you and kiss me so tenderly I almost forgot for a second This dream is not reality Your up ahead there in the distance behind my eyes Green and blues fading Thoughts and dreams never realized You bring me here and pull me close Your arms surrounding A tender ghost Haunted I am by your lips and touch Begging to need something I know this much I close my eyes and give in to the feelings Knowing that when I open them The images will be fleeting Just in case I forget what this is like Promise me you will never know someone else this way The thought of you giving her your love Would kill me slowly every day I never knew these feelings could take over my soul I never knew such joy would be found In letting something go I am stepping back away from my fears New ideas have replaced Things I only conquered once with tears Who knows the new person Who is waiting on the other side Who would have thought She had so much pride Lead me near and lead me far I will follow you until I can walk no more Until our final days come calling Old and gray we will sit and stare Looking at each other and just knowing This love can surpass anything Centuries will keep on turning Decades of birth and death This flame in our hearts though Never to be put out Never ending |
Wow girl! You really placed the passion here. This kept me hanging on with every line.
"The branches breaking in the wind You used to climb that same tree Now you sit beneath Wondering how to get to the top again Or if you ever will" Some how those words captured me and pulled me in. Great work. :D |
"I still hear the silence
knocking on the door" I love that line - very moving work here and I thank you for sharing. |
Very well done, Nikki.
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your words force feelings, that's not an easy task for any writer. this is an excellent piece of work, thank you for sharing it.
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Wow that was beautiful, so sad and it truly touched me.
Thanks. |
That was beautiful, I wish for true happiness in your future. Thank you for sharing your beautiful and touching words of truth.
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wow nice. Your very good.
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What can I say that everyone else hasn't said? It was very touching and sad, and in a sense lost. Lost because you gave that last day and you have those memories to look back on even though you will never feel the same so now you don't know what to do or where to turn! So write it down and then things might get better, but not until you start living again.
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It made me want to cry and I never cry.
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I'm always amazed by writers who can make something very personal engaging to others, and judging by the response, i was not the only one sucked in to your words, Nikki.
Here's to less painful inspiration... |
Excellent piece, nikki
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Stranger
She knew she loved him the moment he touched her
Wait. She thought that about every man She knew she would be letting him have her Before he even got out of her car She pulled him to her and teased him with her lips A little taste perhaps Of what she could do with her hips Running her hands though his so soft hair Kissing his neck and making him swear He tried telling her no over and over She tired letting him know he couldn't control her Her hands were sliding down into his pants He was loosing his patience with her persistence Still she pulled up her dress and slid onto his lap She smiled, as he gave no resistance His hands were finding themselves on her tits She was moaning softly and imaging him inside her She pulled on his cock with her free hand He was just a little wet on the end It drove her crazy to know how much she turned him on It made him angry realizing she was his for only this moment She whispered "fuck" so softly he could barely hear it Now he wouldn't be able to stop what was happening As she pushed her panties aside and unzipped his pants Kissing his lips and meeting his glance She held her breath as she pushed him inside her Letting it all go as he moved up and down The leather seats were cold on her bare skin He was taking advantage of her having him He pulled on her little nipples with his teeth Having him inside her just couldn't compare She wanted badly to take him there To make him feel like never before To make him want to never leave her Could the lust alone keep him here Would he keep coming back and wanting more Would she be content with just being his whore Faster and fasted the heat was rising She could feel him just about to loose control He felt the warmth inside of her and knew he couldn't last much longer Seconds passed and no release She stopped moving and looked into his eyes Caught in the moment of pleasure and pain She realized she didn't even know his name |
I read this three times. Awesome and sad at the same time.
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very well done, very well done indeed
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Whoa. I sort of wonder how the guy feels...
The style works very well-it almost feels like a memory in how the words connect with out formality. Kudos for another great work. |
lust from within, motioned movements, softness of an act so pure and natural. Does it really matter if a name is attached when two people are in the throngs of the moment? Maybe later when the needs have been satisfied, because you might want to do it again.
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Excellent, delicious, sexy, appealing! Need I say more?
You have a wonderful way with words my friend! ;) |
This got kinda lost among the threads here. I need to start writing again....when I can find it inside of me.
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just start with a word, that's all it takes. Beautiful stuff you've got inside you :)
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nikki your AMAZING!!
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Notice me...
You watch as I blend in Remember me As you linger in the past to blind to see Take me in My lost soul aches of this misery Let me feel What pain has robbed from me I wish to know The other side of this darkness So let me go Slip your hand through mine Make me real I am yet a glimmer in your eye Taste these tears Justify the reason they fall so far Pass the time With me a circle in your arms Realize The pain I try so hard to hide Love me more Then you ever thought you would know Take me where I always imagined I would go Let me be Something you will always need Open your eyes Notice me..... I wrote this one quickly with not as much work as I usually put into them. I liked it just the same though.:) |
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