Charge of thunder
 

Scoured is the intimidation that falls timidly upon my lips
broken open upon the sores of enlightenment
sputtering and softened
Speaking through droplets of purity
our words are still stained
irredecent and still needing light.
No thoughts to ponder, no need to slow down
just little bits of curiosity swimming from your lips
Poison me
take away my laugter filter it with sorrow
leave me keeping hidden your own desires
ravish me
throw thunder around me
dripping spike of pain
radiant it all seems singing within a lightening storm
tripping over fallen vowels
gasping from the true ligthness of rain
and still I fell the tightness of the wind
fueling me, suffocating me
shallow comes the gasps now
vacant lays the son
breaking
clouds are still running dodging convulsing
come down the thunder of my poems
come down the tunder of my fear
come down the thunder of the unforgettable clap
charge
charges still revolting from the volt that has tired me.
Sing and sing and sing
for we are all damned.




Ok, I know its kind of dumpy, but everything i write comes from the top of my head and i dont rewrite it.
Usually i do it writing on paper, but I fugured i would just drip a few on to the keyboard instead.

That first line almost made me fall off my chair. I reread it five times before I went on. Very good. I write the way you do. I enjoyed this,thanks

Very nice. I can't believe you haven't gotten more feedback for this. I especially liked the "Come down the thunder..." part.

Thanks a lot guys, it is cool that you got a kick out of it :)

Scoured is the intimidation that falls timidly upon my lips
broken open upon the sores of enlightenment

There's only one thing that can describe those lines: :eek:

love it...the conflict, the emotion...it's very authentic, and there is a part of me that knows EXACTLY what that storm of poety is like when it comes out of raw hurt...

I love your writing style, and deeply wish i could transform my poetry like you do. this is a masterpeice and i wish you the best of luck in the future.