06-26-2011, 11:24 PM | #1 (permalink) |
Minion of Joss
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One or more poems (mine)
So I thought I might post a poem, and if anyone responded, perhaps I might post more.
I don't write a whole lot of poetry, although I enjoy writing it when that's the way the wind sits. This one was written to my wife, as part of making up from a quarrel. The Northwest Passage
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06-27-2011, 03:50 AM | #2 (permalink) |
warrior bodhisattva
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You say you don't write a lot of poetry; however, you seem to have a good command over rhythm and metaphor here. It's a nice piece.
I'm of the opinion that you should probably post more.
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06-27-2011, 06:53 PM | #3 (permalink) |
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I'm not a fancy-schmancy poetry critic or anything, but I enjoyed it very much and would echo BG's sentiment that you post more.
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06-29-2011, 09:49 AM | #4 (permalink) |
Minion of Joss
Location: The Windy City
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This is a bit of an older one. I wrote it for my last serious girlfriend before I met my wife.
Something New Under The Sun
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