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seretogis · 05-18-2003, 07:52 PM

new and improved, more teen angst than ever before!

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horrible beautiful secret

The smile on your face
draws me like a moth to a flame
And I wonder, if you knew,
things would still be the same

I only wish I could tell
how I feel about you
In my dreams I feel
that you already knew

This secret of mine

Alas, my romantic wishing,
my hopes, my dreams, my fears
When the truth is known to you,
I pray to see you through my tears

I love you in a way
that no one could explain
And thoughts of your rejection
cause me such pain

This horrible secret of mine

Better not to tell you
and merely admire from afar
Or shall I take the chance
and wish upon your star

To lose you would be worse
Than the sieze of my soul
Losing you would destroy me
So my heart must pay the toll

This beautiful secret of mine

Remove from me these chains
Of pity, doubt, and fear
Show to me somehow
A path which is clear

Until I can trust myself
Enough to tell you how I feel
I must hide this secret
'Til I'm served my last meal

This horrible beautiful secret of mine

My soul and pen become one
As I think of us two
In hopes you will read this
and know I write of you

When you do understand
And rip my heart from my chest
Please realize, these tears of blood
Were only for the best

krazykemist · 05-19-2003, 04:11 AM

Great imagery and the message is clear.
Nice work.

Angel · 05-19-2003, 04:52 PM

I really like the texture and feel of this. Very moving.
Such conflict residing deep within.
A pleasure to read.
Thank you for sharing.

Eowyn_Vala · 05-26-2003, 12:02 PM

this is one of the most beautiful pieces i have ever read. your writing is very moving and i am at a loss for what to say.

urgodhere · 05-26-2003, 09:19 PM

Very very good. I love the message and the tone/imagery is excellent for the message. Very pleasurable to read. Plz post more of ur outstanding work.

SaltPork · 06-04-2003, 07:14 PM

Stunning in it's visuals and very moving. Thank you for sharing this, I'm sure many can relate.

bobdobbs8056135 · 06-14-2003, 05:14 PM

tone of a certain age adequately summed

a_divine_martyr · 06-14-2003, 11:30 PM

Great piece of writing.

seretogis · 06-28-2003, 01:33 AM

If you likey, you can see my other poetry at:
http://www.tfproject.org/tfp/showthr...&postid=327619

Or, you can view it on my website along with other writings, by clicking the "www" button below.

J.R.V.A. · 06-30-2003, 03:43 PM

Cool, good stuff. Thanks for sharing

fallen_angel · 07-20-2003, 02:34 PM

great work. . . the imagery is amazing and the emotions that you put out into the open are wonderful. . . thank you

05-18-2003, 07:52 PM	#1 (permalink)
seretogis Huggles, sir? Location: Seattle	horrible beautiful secret new and improved, more teen angst than ever before! ----- horrible beautiful secret The smile on your face draws me like a moth to a flame And I wonder, if you knew, things would still be the same I only wish I could tell how I feel about you In my dreams I feel that you already knew This secret of mine Alas, my romantic wishing, my hopes, my dreams, my fears When the truth is known to you, I pray to see you through my tears I love you in a way that no one could explain And thoughts of your rejection cause me such pain This horrible secret of mine Better not to tell you and merely admire from afar Or shall I take the chance and wish upon your star To lose you would be worse Than the sieze of my soul Losing you would destroy me So my heart must pay the toll This beautiful secret of mine Remove from me these chains Of pity, doubt, and fear Show to me somehow A path which is clear Until I can trust myself Enough to tell you how I feel I must hide this secret 'Til I'm served my last meal This horrible beautiful secret of mine My soul and pen become one As I think of us two In hopes you will read this and know I write of you When you do understand And rip my heart from my chest Please realize, these tears of blood Were only for the best __________________ seretogis - sieg heil perfect little dream the kind that hurts the most, forgot how it feels well almost no one to blame always the same, open my eyes wake up in flames

05-19-2003, 04:11 AM	#2 (permalink)
krazykemist Psycho Location: New Orleans	Great imagery and the message is clear. Nice work. __________________ "Everyone thinks of changing the world, but no one thinks of changing himself." -- Tolstoy

05-19-2003, 04:52 PM	#3 (permalink)
Angel Naughty Just Right Location: Euphoria	I really like the texture and feel of this. Very moving. Such conflict residing deep within. A pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing. __________________ In the depth of winter, I finally learned that there was within me an invincible summer. ~Albert Camus

05-26-2003, 12:02 PM	#4 (permalink)
Eowyn_Vala Insane Location: There's no place like home..	this is one of the most beautiful pieces i have ever read. your writing is very moving and i am at a loss for what to say. __________________ Cain: I know what you're doing. I've lead troops into battle before. DG: And, how am I doing? Cain: Well, there's less hugging when I do it

06-04-2003, 07:14 PM	#6 (permalink)
SaltPork Everything's better with bacon Location: In your local grocer's freezer.	Stunning in it's visuals and very moving. Thank you for sharing this, I'm sure many can relate. __________________ It was like that when I got here....I swear.

05-26-2003, 09:19 PM	#5 (permalink)
urgodhere Banned Location: Limbo	Very very good. I love the message and the tone/imagery is excellent for the message. Very pleasurable to read. Plz post more of ur outstanding work.

06-14-2003, 05:14 PM	#7 (permalink)
bobdobbs8056135 Upright Location: in the woods	tone of a certain age adequately summed __________________ the days run over the hills like wild horses...-Bukowsky- i am the flying rodeo clown of death in qpids liberation army... lending my strange services in the noble cause of taking over the world before microsoft enslaves us all.

06-14-2003, 11:30 PM	#8 (permalink)
a_divine_martyr Insane	Great piece of writing. __________________ Censorship and thought control can only exist in secrecy and darkness...

06-28-2003, 01:33 AM	#9 (permalink)
seretogis Huggles, sir? Location: Seattle	If you likey, you can see my other poetry at: http://www.tfproject.org/tfp/showthr...&postid=327619 Or, you can view it on my website along with other writings, by clicking the "www" button below. __________________ seretogis - sieg heil perfect little dream the kind that hurts the most, forgot how it feels well almost no one to blame always the same, open my eyes wake up in flames

06-30-2003, 03:43 PM	#10 (permalink)
J.R.V.A. Junkie Location: Utah	Cool, good stuff. Thanks for sharing __________________ And as she plays, her sweet song of laughter floats through the air and warms my heart

07-20-2003, 02:34 PM	#11 (permalink)
fallen_angel Psycho Location: Somewhere between the Havens and the Earth	great work. . . the imagery is amazing and the emotions that you put out into the open are wonderful. . . thank you __________________ from the Havens I have fallen. . . to the earth as a mangled form. . . writhing in pain, my wings torn and bloodied. . . I have one purpose, only one goal. . . to find you and love you, for I am your. . . fallen angel