Tainted- Poem
 

Tainted

I have been tainted.
Noone will want me now.
Noone will want what comes with
Being tainted.

My blood carrys it,
My body quivers with it,
My brain knows it,
My heart recirculates it.

The taintedness.
Each breath with a memeory of you
Retaints it.

Until it becomes thicker,
Darker, murkier.
Then it grabs hold and chokes.
Killing from the inside out…..
This murderous taint.

I know how you feel....
Like a song I heard once, It's always dark before the dawn
Thanks

That Is a really good Poem.
Real feeling!

More please :)

I like a lot!

The flash backs that that created for me are horrific, because of my own experiences. I am very moved. thankyou.

I'm sorry to say that I found nothing intriguing about your poem. The piece needs more concrete details and less abstraction. Who is this about, etc. Mix up the langauge more and give it something that would lend to a more universal meaning. Right now I dont know who this about and dont care. Give me a reason to care.

DylanMarsh
I got more of the impression that the poem is aout themselves and that the other person they are referring to is secondary, its the aftermath that they are talkingabout. the poison lasts a long time.
I see it as beiong a part of the first person and how now they are damaged goods .

We all get different things out of peoples writigs.
got me it was a great piece,
Maybe you just cant relate to this particular writing